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We'll call her Lilith
Because she broke
her rosary beads early
and thought jesus
made too many rules
for a cunt to follow,
she didn't take to sidewalks
but knew the streets
each name sat
on her slim
fingertips.
Took to upper class
and was mean
as hell about it,
she was everything
their wives, girlfriends
and partners
dreamed
about
her rubber legs
stained with grime
from requests
they demanded,
they ask for more
because she was there
and money
was ready to burn
inside leather
trousers like
cigarette
burns.
I think it filled
up more for them
than the figures
lining in her wallet
but those figures
are nothing to
turn a nose up at,
sending herself
off to play at night
was all part of it
and odd marriage
requests was nothing
out of the blue
either.
Do those
six p.m alarms
still ring off
at times
do you feel
rosary beads
still snapping
in-between
your teeth
Lilith?
Published 17th Jun 2023
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- Edited 17th Jun 2023 8:51am
17th Jun 2023 8:38am
Wow. I guess it’s my turn to say I can’t believe nobody has commented on this.
I’m a big fan of occult books, and I’ve not long finished reading The Canticles Of Lilith (Nicholaj & Katy de Mattos Frisvold) where she is described as a Satanic muse, the witch-mother, the erotic word of creation, the holy spirit herself. I mean… that’s a big claim. I’ve quite often read memes that say “if you aren’t somebody the church would have burned 500 years ago are you even living?” and Lilith… well. What a babe. She snatches that title with ease and stops for selfies with the flames.
I think your poem here personifies that spirit well, and highlights how rebellion speaks to people. And it stays throughout our lives in how we react, the causes we choose to align with, how we dress and express ourselves. And as a woman hero… I mean… she basically got sick of everyone’s shit and went her own way. There’s power in that.
I love that this is in the Bukowski competition, because Buk is such a powerful personality, that the last thing you expect is for a woman to open up her mouth and let that rebellion fall out, but here we are. And that makes the entry all the more valid.
Thank you for sharing this one. It made my inner Lilith cook marshmallows on my bonfire.
-M
I’m a big fan of occult books, and I’ve not long finished reading The Canticles Of Lilith (Nicholaj & Katy de Mattos Frisvold) where she is described as a Satanic muse, the witch-mother, the erotic word of creation, the holy spirit herself. I mean… that’s a big claim. I’ve quite often read memes that say “if you aren’t somebody the church would have burned 500 years ago are you even living?” and Lilith… well. What a babe. She snatches that title with ease and stops for selfies with the flames.
I think your poem here personifies that spirit well, and highlights how rebellion speaks to people. And it stays throughout our lives in how we react, the causes we choose to align with, how we dress and express ourselves. And as a woman hero… I mean… she basically got sick of everyone’s shit and went her own way. There’s power in that.
I love that this is in the Bukowski competition, because Buk is such a powerful personality, that the last thing you expect is for a woman to open up her mouth and let that rebellion fall out, but here we are. And that makes the entry all the more valid.
Thank you for sharing this one. It made my inner Lilith cook marshmallows on my bonfire.
-M
17th Jun 2023 2:53pm
Breaking her rosary beads. A BIG moment of getting to see things in a clearer fashion and breaking away from the bullshit. I love it. Regards, Robert.
17th Jun 2023 4:32pm
an interesting girl of the streets, I wouldn't mind running into and sharing a cigarette or two with her
18th Jun 2023 2:52am
Dear N,
This is the type of poem that is so profound I’m positive no matter what I write it won’t match how I’m truly left feeling. I love the in your face, take no prisoner main character. She wasn’t going to put up with the b.s. no matter how she had to get out. She’s fierce. The mention of the rosary beads is a fabulous nod to the convention of religious dogma and just how restrained it is/can be. Outstanding write. H 🌷
This is the type of poem that is so profound I’m positive no matter what I write it won’t match how I’m truly left feeling. I love the in your face, take no prisoner main character. She wasn’t going to put up with the b.s. no matter how she had to get out. She’s fierce. The mention of the rosary beads is a fabulous nod to the convention of religious dogma and just how restrained it is/can be. Outstanding write. H 🌷
19th Jun 2023 8:57am
Hi Neves,
Like all your work, quality.
Great theme. Nice to see a day in that life.
I can feel you spitting disdain. Skilled writer.
Regards,
BITS
Like all your work, quality.
Great theme. Nice to see a day in that life.
I can feel you spitting disdain. Skilled writer.
Regards,
BITS
1st Feb 2024 8:59pm
My cat's name is Lilith and, yes, I know the allusion and you are a spooky, gifted poet and my cat and I have just discovered your poetry and like it a great deal.
TY.
TY.
