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Caverna
Your now meaningless words, where do the sounds go?
Need more than the why's and trapped dense secrets in the sediment of my soul.
I should always travel deeper.
Hike paths barren of footprints inside my veins.
That lead to the ancient underground caves in my mind.
Thoughts in these dark, damp parts are more sinister and less refined.
A water of tears trickles down my cool limestone cerebrum.
Numb to run.
I can hear your meaningless words loud and clear.
And yet you remain, vastly no where near.
Need more than the why's and trapped dense secrets in the sediment of my soul.
I should always travel deeper.
Hike paths barren of footprints inside my veins.
That lead to the ancient underground caves in my mind.
Thoughts in these dark, damp parts are more sinister and less refined.
A water of tears trickles down my cool limestone cerebrum.
Numb to run.
I can hear your meaningless words loud and clear.
And yet you remain, vastly no where near.
Author's Note
I saved this as a draft. Of course it didn't save. So this is version 2.
I like to think of my mind as having caves.
I like to think of my mind as having caves.
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16th Jun 2023 11:37pm
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18th Jun 2023 9:24pm
You hear but you are wiser than to take those sounds to heart. You're obviously in a deep very dark place right now but I know many of us feel your journey deeply. Maybe not as deep as the deepest cave or deeper than the Titanic but we are with you... believe it! Incidentally, you will find life in the deepest, coldest darkest places! 😊
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18th Jun 2023 10:29pm
Yes life exists even in the dark and cold.
I'm living proof.
Thanks for reading. 😊
I'm living proof.
Thanks for reading. 😊
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19th Jun 2023 9:00am
Hi Debbie,
Another enjoyable read. Digging deeper to the more sinister thoughts, ain't that true!
Brilliant lines to finish.
can hear your meaningless words loud and clear.
And yet you remain, vastly no where near.
Regards
BITS
Another enjoyable read. Digging deeper to the more sinister thoughts, ain't that true!
Brilliant lines to finish.
can hear your meaningless words loud and clear.
And yet you remain, vastly no where near.
Regards
BITS
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Re: Re. Caverna
19th Jun 2023 10:27am
Hello!! Thanks for stopping bye. And for your nice comments.
Have a wonderful day! 🌻
Have a wonderful day! 🌻
Re. Caverna
22nd Jun 2023 2:30am
I love how descriptive your metaphors and emotions are. It's like an intwined and definitive aesthetic that creates and captures a proper environment, suitable for you expression. Easy to imagine, as well. The transitions and direction are also very concrete, as you "portray" many angles. I can almost imagine the place somewhere, far off. Like you feel distant to whom you allude to. Anyway, keep up the good work.
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22nd Jun 2023 10:29am
Thanks so much for reading. I do like metaphors, lol. I appreciate all the feedback so much.