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my first n last letter...
When I looked
a little in the
chasm of love,
I felt that heaven
has descended.
n I filled my eyes
with dreams like
foam with bubbles.
The feelings of the
heart were squeeze
down on paper.
by hiding face
in silky hair when
i extended my
hand to give him
the letter,
He snatched the
letter from my
hands and threw it
on the ground.
And said :
Which era are you living in?
My eyes were
filled with a salty sea,
the edges didn't let
the water out,
I was getting
drenched in
the rain of love
and he was like
the burning sun
who was throwing
fire at me,
It was such a
moment when
the sun was rising
spreading the darkness,
and fierce snakes
were sitting on the roses.
And my lips was longing
to kiss his lips,
now became widow.
a little in the
chasm of love,
I felt that heaven
has descended.
n I filled my eyes
with dreams like
foam with bubbles.
The feelings of the
heart were squeeze
down on paper.
by hiding face
in silky hair when
i extended my
hand to give him
the letter,
He snatched the
letter from my
hands and threw it
on the ground.
And said :
Which era are you living in?
My eyes were
filled with a salty sea,
the edges didn't let
the water out,
I was getting
drenched in
the rain of love
and he was like
the burning sun
who was throwing
fire at me,
It was such a
moment when
the sun was rising
spreading the darkness,
and fierce snakes
were sitting on the roses.
And my lips was longing
to kiss his lips,
now became widow.
Published 2nd Jun 2023
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2nd Jun 2023 3:52pm
I have been writing letters to friends (with a dip pen) as a bit of an experiment. Not something many people do anymore. One friend described getting a letter like getting a present. They actually saved it for the perfect time in the day when it could be completely enjoyed and appreciated. If someone threw a letter on the ground, they are not worth your time.
Yes, this is a very literal interpretation of your work. I get that this could be a metaphor for putting forward your feelings about someone and being rejected. For me the idea of tossing away your letter is very powerful.
Yes, this is a very literal interpretation of your work. I get that this could be a metaphor for putting forward your feelings about someone and being rejected. For me the idea of tossing away your letter is very powerful.
2nd Jun 2023 4:24pm
Letter writing is like a gift in this digital age. But not everyone has such thinking. Well I liked that you write letters. And yes he threw that letter on the ground, that was an accident for me, which I will remember for whole life. Well thanks much for adding this stuff in your reading list.
5th Jul 2023 9:14pm
Very beautifully written. In today's mobile age sending a written letter is a rarity, I sympathize with you a lot, I would probably do the same for it's worth. The letter should have the value of a declaration of love.
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3rd Jun 2023 5:39am
Such a sad piece, a love letter can last the test of time , through every era. It’s a beautiful thing to receive and he is a fool for making a mockery of it.
4th Jun 2023 1:17pm
Yes, love letter is full of feelings, but people who consider it as a minor paper are fools. Well thanks for coming by n commenting.
7th Jun 2023 4:59am
There is nothing more special than someone who truly cares and shows how much they care by expressing their feelings in one of the most intimate and meaningful ways such as a letter expressing their love. He is truly a fool in so many ways and on so many levels. HUGS
7th Jun 2023 8:00am
Yes, of course, many people have come in my life but I have not found anyone like me till now who understands me n my feelings!! well thanks for your response.
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21st Jul 2023 3:42am
Thank you very much for checking my writing. and encourage me by adding my writing in your reading list..! Thank you
