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Complex Relations
Why are you trying to teach me,
When you have so much to learn?
You may be the elder,
But my respect, you have yet to earn.
You live in a world,
Which no longer exists.
Unwilling to move forward,
To change, you resist.
You're a slave to "duty",
Believing it's your fate.
But life is no longer about service,
It is, in fact, what you create.
Learn that you have choices.
You no longer need to be trapped.
Free yourself from the burdens.
Open your eyes! You're no longer strapped.
Don't try to teach me,
When you're reluctant to learn.
You're stuck in the past,
Willingly allowing your bridges to burn.
When you have so much to learn?
You may be the elder,
But my respect, you have yet to earn.
You live in a world,
Which no longer exists.
Unwilling to move forward,
To change, you resist.
You're a slave to "duty",
Believing it's your fate.
But life is no longer about service,
It is, in fact, what you create.
Learn that you have choices.
You no longer need to be trapped.
Free yourself from the burdens.
Open your eyes! You're no longer strapped.
Don't try to teach me,
When you're reluctant to learn.
You're stuck in the past,
Willingly allowing your bridges to burn.
Published 22nd May 2023
Author's Note
It's been a very long time since I last wrote a poem, so I realise this isn't as sophisticated as my writing (I hope) has been in the past. There's a couple of lines that I'm not entirely happy with, but having reread it a few times, I'm still unsure how to change it. Perhaps some friendly, constructive advise could help.
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22nd May 2023 7:13pm
Poem sounds a good way to address to someone who is intransigently stuck in ways that are unhelpful in this day and age, such as a much older parent or spouse who shows no empathy for what today's generation lives under - (although there are some older values that seem to have been too readily thrown overboard)..
