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I Love You
Like roses bleed the color red
Blooming velvet petals of flesh
Gifting bouquets of life
Like the sky breezes into the blue
Creating fingers of soft air
Tracing your silhouette
Like the sun kisses skin into gold
With patient warm lips
Tinting flavors of you
Like parched soil wishes for
Spring rainbows
Brightening your soul
Like tides sing to the moon
In harmony with midnight
Serenading you to sleep
I wrote this for you
But life is hard
Decided to keep it for myself
Blooming velvet petals of flesh
Gifting bouquets of life
Like the sky breezes into the blue
Creating fingers of soft air
Tracing your silhouette
Like the sun kisses skin into gold
With patient warm lips
Tinting flavors of you
Like parched soil wishes for
Spring rainbows
Brightening your soul
Like tides sing to the moon
In harmony with midnight
Serenading you to sleep
I wrote this for you
But life is hard
Decided to keep it for myself
Author's Note
I originally wrote this around Valentines Day at work.
Finally ready to share
no music needed
Finally ready to share
no music needed
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. I Love You
22nd May 2023 4:12am
Wow!
So achingly beautiful and heartfelt.
The last stanza is so relatable. Sometimes its difficult to put our feelings for someone out there.
So achingly beautiful and heartfelt.
The last stanza is so relatable. Sometimes its difficult to put our feelings for someone out there.
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Re: Re. I Love You
22nd May 2023 4:19am
Hi Her
Thank you so much. The last stanza is a bit abrupt as in changing
direction but so is life! LOL
Just decided to keep it in the piece.
So happy you enjoyed:)
Thank you so much. The last stanza is a bit abrupt as in changing
direction but so is life! LOL
Just decided to keep it in the piece.
So happy you enjoyed:)
Re. I Love You
22nd May 2023 5:32am
Well, isn't this just a lovely breath of beautiful fresh air!
I felt this impact deeper and deeper with each wonderful stanza rolling into the next. You really conjured such rich, heartfelt imagery which allows the reader to take these soft impactful glimpses of tender emotional conveyance you ink so so well.
I like that you wanted to keep the poem a bit longer for yourself, sometimes we need to hang on to something so open and palpable just for ourselves, as reminder and as a kind of poetic token of happiness and joy.
I feel it's impact even more, knowing that you've eventually shared it with us, which couldn't be cooler.
Again, it's freaking fantastic to have you back with us!
You were missed.
🌹B
I felt this impact deeper and deeper with each wonderful stanza rolling into the next. You really conjured such rich, heartfelt imagery which allows the reader to take these soft impactful glimpses of tender emotional conveyance you ink so so well.
I like that you wanted to keep the poem a bit longer for yourself, sometimes we need to hang on to something so open and palpable just for ourselves, as reminder and as a kind of poetic token of happiness and joy.
I feel it's impact even more, knowing that you've eventually shared it with us, which couldn't be cooler.
Again, it's freaking fantastic to have you back with us!
You were missed.
🌹B
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Re: Re. I Love You
26th May 2023 7:49pm
Hi Beautiful B!!
Thank you so much. But I gotta give you some love/credit on this. You wrote a poem a while back with 3 lines. Loved the whole look and challenge of it so I do them every once in a while. So in a way you taught me this format - so thank you so much.
I'm glad to be back too. Glad to see you here as well!!
Cheers to writing and
all the education from terrific writers on DUP!!!
Thank you so much. But I gotta give you some love/credit on this. You wrote a poem a while back with 3 lines. Loved the whole look and challenge of it so I do them every once in a while. So in a way you taught me this format - so thank you so much.
I'm glad to be back too. Glad to see you here as well!!
Cheers to writing and
all the education from terrific writers on DUP!!!
Re. I Love You
22nd May 2023 5:45am
Dear A,
Where! Where have you been? What a delight to see you! I’ll come back to comment on the poem, I’m so happy to see you now! x
H🌷
Where! Where have you been? What a delight to see you! I’ll come back to comment on the poem, I’m so happy to see you now! x
H🌷
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Re: Re. I Love You
26th May 2023 7:51pm
Hi H!!
Giiiirl life has had me by the skin of my teeth lately. LOL
It's been challenging to sit down and write - too much going on offsite.
But I'm going to try to do better. I missed ya!!
Giiiirl life has had me by the skin of my teeth lately. LOL
It's been challenging to sit down and write - too much going on offsite.
But I'm going to try to do better. I missed ya!!
Re. I Love You
22nd May 2023 12:09pm
I'm glad you're back and writing again ...
Lovely sentiment
BIG ( new abbreviation for BIG LIKE) ..
Lovely sentiment
BIG ( new abbreviation for BIG LIKE) ..
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Re: Re. I Love You
26th May 2023 7:54pm
Hi PS
If I'm not trying I'm dying. LOL
Will try and do much better in the future. Just in
challenging times right now - offsite. It's so important
to surround yourself with encouraging people to motivate you
to put your booty in gear:)
It feels great to post a couple of things on DUP.
I'm digging your new abbreviation!! hahaha
If I'm not trying I'm dying. LOL
Will try and do much better in the future. Just in
challenging times right now - offsite. It's so important
to surround yourself with encouraging people to motivate you
to put your booty in gear:)
It feels great to post a couple of things on DUP.
I'm digging your new abbreviation!! hahaha
Re. I Love You
22nd May 2023 9:05pm
Re: Re. I Love You
26th May 2023 7:57pm
Hey Tim!!
Very funny. I see you took your funny pill before commenting. hahaha
Thank you for your snaps on this and saying it's beyond gorgeous!!!
I am BEYOND grateful.. hehehe
Thanks for the RL Amigo!!
Woop Woop!!
Very funny. I see you took your funny pill before commenting. hahaha
Thank you for your snaps on this and saying it's beyond gorgeous!!!
I am BEYOND grateful.. hehehe
Thanks for the RL Amigo!!
Woop Woop!!
Re. I Love You
23rd May 2023 1:07am
Re: Re. I Love You
26th May 2023 7:59pm
Hey Cisco
Welp, if there is ever a day to have hot sex - Valentines Day is it. LOL
I'm gana keep on keeping on amigo!!
Thanks for stopping by!
Welp, if there is ever a day to have hot sex - Valentines Day is it. LOL
I'm gana keep on keeping on amigo!!
Thanks for stopping by!
Re. I Love You
23rd May 2023 1:43am
Dear A,
I’m back. I so enjoyed this poem for its duality. If you’ve written it with someone else in mind as a way of moving on it’s incredibly forgiving. Turning it around and applying toward yourself is brilliant. Self love and self encouragement is a lost art, if it was ever truly instilled in us in the first place. Life is so hard and I really appreciated this lovely reminder to treat myself a little gentler in the process was just the ticket. Beautiful write. H 🌷
I’m back. I so enjoyed this poem for its duality. If you’ve written it with someone else in mind as a way of moving on it’s incredibly forgiving. Turning it around and applying toward yourself is brilliant. Self love and self encouragement is a lost art, if it was ever truly instilled in us in the first place. Life is so hard and I really appreciated this lovely reminder to treat myself a little gentler in the process was just the ticket. Beautiful write. H 🌷
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Re: Re. I Love You
26th May 2023 8:04pm
Hey Amiga:)
Loving yourself can be easily forgotten when you're in the middle of a tough time. Eventually things calm down and we remember. I did write this for someone else who is golden - but edited it to share on the site for everyone else to remember it's okay to love yourself too. Valentines day is hard on people who are single or just had a breakup.
Missed ya!!
Thanks for the RL Lovely one!!
Loving yourself can be easily forgotten when you're in the middle of a tough time. Eventually things calm down and we remember. I did write this for someone else who is golden - but edited it to share on the site for everyone else to remember it's okay to love yourself too. Valentines day is hard on people who are single or just had a breakup.
Missed ya!!
Thanks for the RL Lovely one!!
Re. I Love You
23rd May 2023 3:51am
But music happens with it, anyway. A song finds its way out no matter what. It wants to be heard. It's meant to be heard. Secrets die lonely. Songs last forever.
Sing your songs, with your notebook and pen even, and never be stopped.
Welcome back.
Not living is harder. Just saying!
Sing your songs, with your notebook and pen even, and never be stopped.
Welcome back.
Not living is harder. Just saying!
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Re: Re. I Love You
26th May 2023 8:08pm
Hey Styx!
Look at you having a small rant about music. hahaha
Okay okay, geesh!! You are right - music lasts forever but sometimes
we need to have quiet time to listen clearly to the signals our brain carries.
It's like our personal internal jukebox!
So happy to see ya stop by for a read
Thanks for all of the encouraging snaps and the RL on this!!
Means a lot!
Look at you having a small rant about music. hahaha
Okay okay, geesh!! You are right - music lasts forever but sometimes
we need to have quiet time to listen clearly to the signals our brain carries.
It's like our personal internal jukebox!
So happy to see ya stop by for a read
Thanks for all of the encouraging snaps and the RL on this!!
Means a lot!
Re. I Love You
23rd May 2023 3:32pm
I really like the use of colors throughout, sweetly sentimental vibe that is warming.
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Re: Re. I Love You
26th May 2023 8:14pm
Hi Daniel!
Yes - that was what inspired me. All the different colors of love.
And how they make us feel. Your comments are always so spot on!!
Thanks for taking the time to read!!
Means a lot!!
Yes - that was what inspired me. All the different colors of love.
And how they make us feel. Your comments are always so spot on!!
Thanks for taking the time to read!!
Means a lot!!
Re. I Love You
25th May 2023 11:25pm
Like tides sing to the Moon. WOW! Magical. I don't know what you were on when you wrote this one... however, I wouldn't mind some of it! ;-)
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Re: Re. I Love You
26th May 2023 8:16pm
Hey there Billy!!
I was on coffee and donuts. LOL Sitting at my desk and my mind just
drifted to this. Started jotting down this and that and put this together.
Was a nice feeling since I hadn't written in a while.
thanks for the RL and taking a read amigo!!
Woop Woop!!
I was on coffee and donuts. LOL Sitting at my desk and my mind just
drifted to this. Started jotting down this and that and put this together.
Was a nice feeling since I hadn't written in a while.
thanks for the RL and taking a read amigo!!
Woop Woop!!