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absence
When he was in my life
there was hope,
and at death's door
there was despair.
I had accepted that
there was no joy in
my eyes at all those places
where he was not there.
The boat of glasses,
wine and colorful flowers
was faded,
where there was no smile
on his lips.
Although my eyes
used to be drunk,
but i didn't get
intoxicated in his absence
I was drowned
in his love,
yet his soul
did not dissolve in me.
What should I pray
to God now?
When he is not present
in my life...
there was hope,
and at death's door
there was despair.
I had accepted that
there was no joy in
my eyes at all those places
where he was not there.
The boat of glasses,
wine and colorful flowers
was faded,
where there was no smile
on his lips.
Although my eyes
used to be drunk,
but i didn't get
intoxicated in his absence
I was drowned
in his love,
yet his soul
did not dissolve in me.
What should I pray
to God now?
When he is not present
in my life...
Published 6th May 2023
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Anonymous
- Edited 2nd Jul 2023 5:45pm
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6th May 2023 3:59pm
You are absolutely right. Living alone means constantly remembering someone left behind. Some people come in life with some purpose and some people leave after giving pain. And they leave their good and bad memories. Well thanks for reading me!
6th May 2023 3:42pm
You have probably summed up a dilemma many people bereaved of past spouses are in with their faith.
6th May 2023 4:06pm
Yes, of course! it is not possible to forget the memories of a close one easily. Breaking up is not easy. Well thanks for stopping by!
6th May 2023 4:07pm
Oof! the injected festering is felt in this sorrowful spill
i felt it
well done
thank You for entering my comp
i felt it
well done
thank You for entering my comp
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Anonymous
- Edited 28th Mar 2024 6:45pm
6th May 2023 9:07pm
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7th May 2023 3:30am
6th May 2023 10:17pm
Melancholic and tragic. Sometimes, things in life make us question why and what, in morality. I feel like the narrator is going through dealing with the phases of accepting one's death, which is metaphorical for absence in general. Quality centrism in the flow, as it unfolds. There's a concrete sense of direction that captures your emotion. Overall, very nice. Thanks for sharing!
7th May 2023 3:37am
Sometimes unexpected things happen to us, and this mostly happens when we are living the golden moments of life. Everything doesn't happen according to our wish in the life. Whatever happens has to be accepted. That's all.. so evrything is acceptable here! Well thank you for reading and for your kind response!
7th May 2023 1:29am
Time heals all wounds. When the time is right you find someone who makes you feel alive again. Keep on writing.
7th May 2023 3:38am
You are right. We jus have to wait n keep patience. Well thanks for always being here 🙂
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Anonymous
22nd Jun 2023 12:17pm
hi again , dimpy
another beautiful poem
congrats
i really like your poem page
MANT
another beautiful poem
congrats
i really like your poem page
MANT
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15th Jan 2024 6:01pm
by potential I mean to improve upon the delivery of this poem. Not in any literal sense.
I wouldn't be qualified to comment on 'that'.
I wouldn't be qualified to comment on 'that'.
16th Jan 2024 2:54am
