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Once Upon a Woman's Body
Rhyme is a wasted crime
when we should be murdering skin
Lust can be the coves where tides never reach,
so breach life’s bearings and destinate land mines
until last faint wisps of vein
skein the colour map for sky burial
Metaphor-Hell is other people
sifting away through dark-hearted gravity
like Laika observing earth for the final time
tidal veils of your thighs
spasms of the groaning seas
Or, rather,
as matter of fact
fuck me until my cock bleeds
and your cunt retreats
when we should be murdering skin
Lust can be the coves where tides never reach,
so breach life’s bearings and destinate land mines
until last faint wisps of vein
skein the colour map for sky burial
Metaphor-Hell is other people
sifting away through dark-hearted gravity
like Laika observing earth for the final time
tidal veils of your thighs
spasms of the groaning seas
Or, rather,
as matter of fact
fuck me until my cock bleeds
and your cunt retreats
Published 11th Mar 2023
Author's Note
Hell is other people. Sartre. Even as a metaphor whore, I'm aware of the limitations of language. Adult content as some are offended by the 'c' word. And I don't mean caring or craving.
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Anonymous
11th Mar 2023 1:22pm
Or rather as a matter of fucking fact, the "c" word is just another wonderful 4 letter word AND don't get me started on Rhyme. (5 dumb letters of, yes, crime)
Retreat? 🙂 isn't that like a warm cozy get away where you find Zen or the center of the universe or something?
Retreat? 🙂 isn't that like a warm cozy get away where you find Zen or the center of the universe or something?
11th Mar 2023 5:18pm
Cheeky could get you in big trouble L. There's another word which starts with a 'c' and contains a 'w'.
Zen? I can only sit still in one space. Meditating would bump my brain. R
Zen? I can only sit still in one space. Meditating would bump my brain. R
Anonymous
- Edited 11th Mar 2023 5:58pm
11th Mar 2023 5:55pm
First of all I just noticed this is a "love" poem
1. The C word in a LOVE poem??!?!?!??! Dreams DO come true
2. You can't call an American woman a cow. Heifer maybe if your name is Mr. Mark (and you run our funky bunch) but knowing you, you will now say it wasn't cow
3. I like lists
4. Lists That go to 10
5. But I do understand people get distracted and only get to 9.
6. Wait ....What?
7. 7. That's it. Really Loz?! I'm in trouble aren't I? 😊
Edit. Zen is the Smooth pattern of the brain
1. The C word in a LOVE poem??!?!?!??! Dreams DO come true
2. You can't call an American woman a cow. Heifer maybe if your name is Mr. Mark (and you run our funky bunch) but knowing you, you will now say it wasn't cow
3. I like lists
4. Lists That go to 10
5. But I do understand people get distracted and only get to 9.
6. Wait ....What?
7. 7. That's it. Really Loz?! I'm in trouble aren't I? 😊
Edit. Zen is the Smooth pattern of the brain
11th Mar 2023 1:28pm
As always, your mastery of the craft is evident. Beautifully done, I’ve always loved the “murdering of skin” metaphor.
11th Mar 2023 5:15pm
Many thanks for the kind comment LG. Appreciated. I do over milk the metaphor. Just enjoy scribbling. That is all.
12th Mar 2023 5:19pm
12th Mar 2023 8:27pm
Many thanks BITS. Didn't think this was a particularly strong write to be candid.
