In Another Rain

To literally live in Grace? I wonder if Wales can spare a village for me?
One close to the rail station of course  

Ha. I'll get the Welsh elves to work. Broken coffee tables are my only carpentry skills, sadly. It's ok L. Yns Mon is building a space station. As always. Rob

Holy fuck that was beautiful.

The opening was hypnotic and the cascading draw was brilliant.

I enjoyed the way you played with the words… that is a lame comment…here:

Holy. Fuck. The linguistic accumen in the fourth stanza made my mouth fall open in fucking awe. That stanza itself is art! Like… Holyshit!!

‘lungs of our city walls
exhale ruins for citadel colours,
aurora flights strengthen streets
name the city a different kind of grace’

Lungs of our … exhale… the metaphor is so damn good l, so clean, and so well executed.

The whole poem was kickasss, and that was, bar-none, the best part.

Many thanks Betty. Appreciated. Never received a Holy Fuck in these portals before. Lol. I wear my heart on my sleeve like a red wet stain (Dorothy Parker wrote that) so hopefully that emerges in my tatty scribbles. Rob  

When I reached the end I had already been picturing it in slant of shadows, like the cycle of daylight across still images. I've been reading it over between creating art on this AI site and the whole has a presence that is widening, closing, that is rather unique.

Many thanks my friend. Your insight and enthusiasm is a treasure. Rob

This is really beautiful, and all I can say is that it pulled me in and made me want each new word, ended to soon (though just right) and brought me back to the beginning to read through it again. It's a real gem, my friend. :-)

Many thanks P. Really good to see you on my page and hope all is well

I like the use of presentation in how you physically arrange the lines of the second verse. The poem as a whole represents a colourful and vividly realised inner landscape, so that reading it is almost like watching an arthouse film.

Diolch mate. Pleased you noticed the presentation and format change. I have previously been stubborn to advice, but even an old hand can change. Rob

Here I can imagine the long distance relationship between of two people in love,. Well nice reading 😊