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Dope!!

Thank you very much. I appreciate it.

Loved the read! However, I don't get the periods.... I used to put periods in my poems and then i realized that, that wasn't really necessary. I feel like it's a bit of an un-organized write if you ask me. Especially with random periods being thrown around. I notice that, some parts of your poem has them and some do not. I suggest, if you do insist on using periods, make sure you distribute them evenly throughout the poem.  However, the message you got across was simple and clear and I loved every word! Great insight on how this world has changed today and how we change along with it! Much love💜

Thank you for reading.  I believe it’s that part of my brain that tells me “It’s the end of the sentence.”  My eyes review and my brain wants to make the correction.

I may edit and see how it feels without the periods.

You mentioned that it felt unorganized. We’re there other aspects or mainly the punctuation?

Thank you for the feedback.

No problem! No, I was mainly talking about the punctuation. Like is said, if you do use periods or punctuationat all, it's probably best to make sure they are distributed evenly and correctly. The overall poem is great! However, when I read it, to ME... it looked like you had forgotten some periods. However, I see you have gotten rid of them entirely! I get testing it to see how it feels. Completely understandable. So....how does it feel??

P.s Now that I'm looking back at it actually, you might want to consider bunching your paragraphs into groups of four. Not sure how to put it exactly. I'm no expert, but what I learned as a child poet a while back, was that if possible, EVEN out the poem. Just my own personal advise. When I write I'm not too specific about my structure. Only when I absolutely feel like it... but if I had written YOUR poem personally, those lines would be grouped into four.

Really like your poem. Periodically I look back in life and write, this makes me want to do it more often.
I see you took KrystalG’s suggestion about the punctuation. I didn’t see this before, but it works great now. I don’t see any reason to change the format. To me, the only rule in poetry is to express.
Well done!

Indeed, the days of dreaming what my ... as a grown up would be
love life, sex life, career, family.  The dream depends on the song, or the sight or sound or smell.

You can change your hair, and even your weight if you try hard enough, but the portal cannot be closed.

FWIW, A period well-used can unequivocally separate one thought or idea from the next, if you choose to not leave that up for interpretation.