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The Absence of Thee
Being whole
not in sight
since your wings
have taken flight
Trying to live
without you now
unsure of myself
knowing not how
Teardrops fall
on pages I write
remembering you
every bit of your light
A strength in you
all my life
my heart bleeds
cut by a knife
I am changed
by the loss
stagnant stone
growing moss
not the same
nor should I be
suffering in
the absence of thee
not in sight
since your wings
have taken flight
Trying to live
without you now
unsure of myself
knowing not how
Teardrops fall
on pages I write
remembering you
every bit of your light
A strength in you
all my life
my heart bleeds
cut by a knife
I am changed
by the loss
stagnant stone
growing moss
not the same
nor should I be
suffering in
the absence of thee
Published 17th Jan 2023
| Edited 21st Dec 2024
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17th Jan 2023 3:34pm
17th Jan 2023 4:13pm
Thank you Robert. It's an ongoing struggle trying to cope with the loss. I appreciate the read and your feedback:) Bless
Mel
Mel
17th Jan 2023 7:54pm
👏 👏 👏 👏!! Nice 👌 👍 ink spill queen 👸 please 🙏 keep on writing ✍ ok peace ✌ and blessings always 🙏
18th Jan 2023 10:30am
21st Jan 2023 4:21am
Dear M,
The rhyming works so nicely as to give it a prayer like quality. Grief is a difficult subject on which to comment yet, you poignantly capture its devastating fall out..
H🌷
The rhyming works so nicely as to give it a prayer like quality. Grief is a difficult subject on which to comment yet, you poignantly capture its devastating fall out..
H🌷
22nd Jan 2023 11:42am
Thank you H. Sadly, I have had many losses in my life but the loss of my mother stays with me every day. I appreciate the read and you taking the time to comment. Bless.
Mel
Mel
20th Dec 2024 1:53pm
Very powerful. The title being the closing line was perfect. One thing, the first stanza, should it be "your" wings? "You" may be a typo.
lisa777
lisa777
