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Metal Shark
Metal Shark flying
High in the dark
Won’t diminish like
A falling star
He lands on his feet
Will it be next to me
Ageless energy
Strength of the sea
I’ll engrave poetry
Onto your metal fins
Into your many gills
I’ll breathe you love songs
Metal Shark soaring
So high in the dark
Do you feel me in
The midnight starry air
If you pass me by
It’s okay
You own the sky
I’ll still feel you
In the breeze that flows by
And when it begins to hurt
I’ll remember to write
Fade into my poetry curse
High in the dark
Won’t diminish like
A falling star
He lands on his feet
Will it be next to me
Ageless energy
Strength of the sea
I’ll engrave poetry
Onto your metal fins
Into your many gills
I’ll breathe you love songs
Metal Shark soaring
So high in the dark
Do you feel me in
The midnight starry air
If you pass me by
It’s okay
You own the sky
I’ll still feel you
In the breeze that flows by
And when it begins to hurt
I’ll remember to write
Fade into my poetry curse
Author's Note
Love the idea of Metal Sharks. Reminds me of airplanes and
people in a way.
Listening to song Fade Into You by Mazzy Star
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ImKY6TZEyrI
people in a way.
Listening to song Fade Into You by Mazzy Star
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ImKY6TZEyrI
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Re. Metal Shark
31st Dec 2022 10:27pm
So beautiful A...
Glad to see you...
Happy New Year...
I ordered Peacock to
watch the Miley Cyrus/Dolly Parton New Years Special...
Was looking for
a less commercial ball drop...
Went with Miley/Dolly...
Making magic cookies...
And other things
in Satan's Kitchen...
In any event...
I very much like
the energy of this piece...
Glad to see you...
Happy New Year...
I ordered Peacock to
watch the Miley Cyrus/Dolly Parton New Years Special...
Was looking for
a less commercial ball drop...
Went with Miley/Dolly...
Making magic cookies...
And other things
in Satan's Kitchen...
In any event...
I very much like
the energy of this piece...
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Re: Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 7:08pm
Hi Cipher:)
Happy New Year Day!!!
It's going to be a great year!
Peacock has a lot of great stuff on it. I don't have it but I'm seriously thinking about it. My parents have it so I watch it when I go over occasionally.
Miley/Dolly!!!
I heard it was awesome on the news feed on my phone so
you chose a winner!!
I've always wanted to go to Dollywood!!
It looks like so much fun. They even have a spa! lol
Magic cookies - uh oh.
Now I'm intrigued buddy. hahaha
I'm so happy you enjoyed it.
Nice to hear from you Cipher.
Wish you nothing but the best New Year. Truly:)
Happy New Year Day!!!
It's going to be a great year!
Peacock has a lot of great stuff on it. I don't have it but I'm seriously thinking about it. My parents have it so I watch it when I go over occasionally.
Miley/Dolly!!!
I heard it was awesome on the news feed on my phone so
you chose a winner!!
I've always wanted to go to Dollywood!!
It looks like so much fun. They even have a spa! lol
Magic cookies - uh oh.
Now I'm intrigued buddy. hahaha
I'm so happy you enjoyed it.
Nice to hear from you Cipher.
Wish you nothing but the best New Year. Truly:)
Re. Metal Shark
31st Dec 2022 10:48pm
I love that song!
And I love how you get so inspired from music that it pours out of you into your own interpretations.
In this one, I think of an airplane. (You're expecting or had company!?)
"I'll breathe you love songs" - quick, I'm drowning so save me!
This write is so wistful. Like you're gazing into the sky, then sea. Looking.
Metal shark or not, it's huggable!
Good to see you in here, Del. You're missed.
Happy New Year!
And I love how you get so inspired from music that it pours out of you into your own interpretations.
In this one, I think of an airplane. (You're expecting or had company!?)
"I'll breathe you love songs" - quick, I'm drowning so save me!
This write is so wistful. Like you're gazing into the sky, then sea. Looking.
Metal shark or not, it's huggable!
Good to see you in here, Del. You're missed.
Happy New Year!
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Re: Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 7:24pm
Hi Styx:)
I love that song too. LOL
Was driving to work on my daily commute and the song came
on. I hadn't heard it in a while and the opening stanza came to me.
Went from there. Love the idea of metal sharks like airplanes and people. We have a few WWII airplane models in our store with sharks for nose art.
Was thinking about getting one for a friend of mine for Christmas but he would have had a cow so I backed out. Super cool though. hahaha
I did have that wistful feeling when writing. I was in a rush when posting cause I had to leave but I wanted to post before the New Year.
So so happy you enjoyed it:)
Later Gator
I love that song too. LOL
Was driving to work on my daily commute and the song came
on. I hadn't heard it in a while and the opening stanza came to me.
Went from there. Love the idea of metal sharks like airplanes and people. We have a few WWII airplane models in our store with sharks for nose art.
Was thinking about getting one for a friend of mine for Christmas but he would have had a cow so I backed out. Super cool though. hahaha
I did have that wistful feeling when writing. I was in a rush when posting cause I had to leave but I wanted to post before the New Year.
So so happy you enjoyed it:)
Later Gator
Re: Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 11:49pm
Me thinks that your friend would have liked a model airplane! I get one every once in awhile. And it has to be a WW2 one. Those were so cool!
I love that word, "wistful" . It's a writer's word.
I love that word, "wistful" . It's a writer's word.
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Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 3:59am
Mazzy Star takes me back to my first love affair. Happy New Year 💖🙏🏻
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Re: Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 7:29pm
Hi Daniel:)
Happy New Year Day.
Something about that song gets you in a mood.
As soon as the first note is played you feel it in
your soul. It came on when I was driving.
Couldn't wait til I got home to lay down and let my
mind float for a minute and see where I would go.
Thanks for stopping by.
Happy New Year Day.
Something about that song gets you in a mood.
As soon as the first note is played you feel it in
your soul. It came on when I was driving.
Couldn't wait til I got home to lay down and let my
mind float for a minute and see where I would go.
Thanks for stopping by.
Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 4:55am
Re: Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 7:33pm
Hi Sisco:)
Happy New Year Day!!
Love can be hot with the right person. I agree. lol
Been super busy off site so I wanted to do one more before
the new year. Thanks for stopping by.
Happy New Year Day!!
Love can be hot with the right person. I agree. lol
Been super busy off site so I wanted to do one more before
the new year. Thanks for stopping by.
Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 5:47am
Dear A,
Feeling very literal tonight. Envisioned a flying metal shark in my mind, just kind of floating around the sky. He was a happy metal shark and I found some solace for myself as I read this. I don’t know the song you referenced but I listened to it and really enjoyed it. Great experience for me tonight in reading your lovely write and learning about a new song. Happy New Year. H🌷
Feeling very literal tonight. Envisioned a flying metal shark in my mind, just kind of floating around the sky. He was a happy metal shark and I found some solace for myself as I read this. I don’t know the song you referenced but I listened to it and really enjoyed it. Great experience for me tonight in reading your lovely write and learning about a new song. Happy New Year. H🌷
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Re: Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 7:41pm
Hi H!!
So happy to hear from you on this New Year Day!!
When writing I envisioned it too!! Seriously.
I was lying on its back writing poetry as it flew in the air.
It even moved like it was swimming instead of flying. hahaha
The song is an older one but it's timeless in my opinion.
I'm so happy you enjoyed my Metal Shark.
I might swing by and pick you up!! LOL
So happy to hear from you on this New Year Day!!
When writing I envisioned it too!! Seriously.
I was lying on its back writing poetry as it flew in the air.
It even moved like it was swimming instead of flying. hahaha
The song is an older one but it's timeless in my opinion.
I'm so happy you enjoyed my Metal Shark.
I might swing by and pick you up!! LOL
Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 7:10pm
Re: Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 7:44pm
Hi Billy!
Happy New Year Day amigo:)
That is the dream buddy. But I'd get cancelled because of
all the emissions. hahaha
Thanks for stopping by!
Happy New Year Day amigo:)
That is the dream buddy. But I'd get cancelled because of
all the emissions. hahaha
Thanks for stopping by!
Re. Metal Shark
1st Jan 2023 7:50pm
Gorgeous like a sirens song...Mazzy Star is very inspiring and inspired a great write here, I've written a few listening to her beautiful voice
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Re: Re. Metal Shark
Hi Tim!!
Happy New Year Day buddy:)
Something about the tone of the song and her voice
just takes me places. Was fun writing - envisioning me writing
on the back of a metal shark. Feeling the air surrounding me up high in the dark. Was pretty cool!!!
Had to write it down before I lost it. LOL
So glad you enjoyed this one:)
Thanks for the RL and stopping by.
Happy New Year Day buddy:)
Something about the tone of the song and her voice
just takes me places. Was fun writing - envisioning me writing
on the back of a metal shark. Feeling the air surrounding me up high in the dark. Was pretty cool!!!
Had to write it down before I lost it. LOL
So glad you enjoyed this one:)
Thanks for the RL and stopping by.
Re. Metal Shark
3rd Jan 2023 3:54pm
The first stanza makes me think flights to the UK prior to moving there.
They were always at night, and I was little so sitting in the belly of these massive flying sharks was just amazing.
I could never sleep even for a minute. I just wanted to take it all in. Soaring through the air.
And somehow he always lands on his feet so many hours later. And I wonder...
If we fell out of the sky into the Atlantic below, how cold it would be...
How many sharks would feed on us if we managed to get out of the plane.
Perhaps a bit morbid to imagine being shark food. But it was a little scary when...
there is nothing below you but ocean, salt ready to preserve your soul in the cold and darkness.
To think that there was a time where people had to cross those scary depths for weeks,
to discover a new world. One that is so familiar and mediocre now.
Wanting to explore other worlds overseas now. This definitely reminds me of the night,
of traveling, and this desire to explore the world.
I love how you captured this desire and need to write in this as well.
It's always so lovely to see you Adelphina and the lovely thought provoking imagery you convey.
And a beautiful smile to go with it as well.
They were always at night, and I was little so sitting in the belly of these massive flying sharks was just amazing.
I could never sleep even for a minute. I just wanted to take it all in. Soaring through the air.
And somehow he always lands on his feet so many hours later. And I wonder...
If we fell out of the sky into the Atlantic below, how cold it would be...
How many sharks would feed on us if we managed to get out of the plane.
Perhaps a bit morbid to imagine being shark food. But it was a little scary when...
there is nothing below you but ocean, salt ready to preserve your soul in the cold and darkness.
To think that there was a time where people had to cross those scary depths for weeks,
to discover a new world. One that is so familiar and mediocre now.
Wanting to explore other worlds overseas now. This definitely reminds me of the night,
of traveling, and this desire to explore the world.
I love how you captured this desire and need to write in this as well.
It's always so lovely to see you Adelphina and the lovely thought provoking imagery you convey.
And a beautiful smile to go with it as well.
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Re: Re. Metal Shark
4th Jan 2023 1:31am
Hi Kristina:)
I've never flown! We always drove where we needed to go.
But there are some places that need a plane. Like the UK.
You've had such an adventurous life. I admire that about you.
I always fall asleep in cars if the travel is long. On an airplane
I'd be excited too. No sleep and I would be a pain in the ass to all the flight attendants. hahaha
Now falling into the ocean is scary. You brought a vision of Titanic
into this comment!
I do love the show Vikings or any Viking movie in all honestly.
They were so fearless back then.
I have a buddy at work who did the whole Ancestry DNA thing and he came back with Viking origins.
If you were to see him you'd get it.
He's husky with a white beard!!
No joke.
So glad you stopped by for a comment and an RL
Always great to hear from ya chica:)
I've never flown! We always drove where we needed to go.
But there are some places that need a plane. Like the UK.
You've had such an adventurous life. I admire that about you.
I always fall asleep in cars if the travel is long. On an airplane
I'd be excited too. No sleep and I would be a pain in the ass to all the flight attendants. hahaha
Now falling into the ocean is scary. You brought a vision of Titanic
into this comment!
I do love the show Vikings or any Viking movie in all honestly.
They were so fearless back then.
I have a buddy at work who did the whole Ancestry DNA thing and he came back with Viking origins.
If you were to see him you'd get it.
He's husky with a white beard!!
No joke.
So glad you stopped by for a comment and an RL
Always great to hear from ya chica:)
Re: Re. Metal Shark
4th Jan 2023 2:06pm
Wow, never flown... we have to get you on a plane girl. ;) Actually I like flying but I am weird. Perhaps it's because I was on so many flights early on in my life. The whole experience, the airport, the plane, the flight. All the chaos... lol It's an experience. Don't like going through security all that much though. I used to kind of zone out in cars.
Yes I thought of Titanic too. Oh the dark freezing water and wondering what is below, certain death. :p
I know some of my ancestry but it would be interesting to do the DNA thing. Never done that. Who knows what surprised you might find. The breakthroughs with DNA are incredible. Vikings are so interesting... so determined and definitely crossed the Atlanta.
It's always great to see you and read your amazing poetry too girl!
Yes I thought of Titanic too. Oh the dark freezing water and wondering what is below, certain death. :p
I know some of my ancestry but it would be interesting to do the DNA thing. Never done that. Who knows what surprised you might find. The breakthroughs with DNA are incredible. Vikings are so interesting... so determined and definitely crossed the Atlanta.
It's always great to see you and read your amazing poetry too girl!
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Re: Re. Metal Shark
5th Jan 2023 1:46am
Hi Sight:)
I love being inspired by music and putting my own spin on it:)
Sad and I'm sure frustrating.
Thanks for stopping by and reading!
I love being inspired by music and putting my own spin on it:)
Sad and I'm sure frustrating.
Thanks for stopping by and reading!