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The Fate of Words
A lustful romance
Probes the mind
Singing and dancing
It searches the castle
For the rarest of words
Those specially reserved for
magic, love, elegance and dance
It carefully tailors them for a form fit
Buffs them to a high shine
Curates them until they’re worthy of their message.
Then sends them off with a kiss
Melancholy
Retreats to the dungeon
Finds words long starved and left for dead
Lines them up in haphazard order
Then marches them out in the cold
To execute their duties
Of carrying a withered message
And face a lonely death
But Crisis
Crisis goosesteps through the mind
Grabs every word it encounters
Stacks them into a heartless pile
Douses them with gasoline
And turns it’s back on their screams as they burn the mind down.
Probes the mind
Singing and dancing
It searches the castle
For the rarest of words
Those specially reserved for
magic, love, elegance and dance
It carefully tailors them for a form fit
Buffs them to a high shine
Curates them until they’re worthy of their message.
Then sends them off with a kiss
Melancholy
Retreats to the dungeon
Finds words long starved and left for dead
Lines them up in haphazard order
Then marches them out in the cold
To execute their duties
Of carrying a withered message
And face a lonely death
But Crisis
Crisis goosesteps through the mind
Grabs every word it encounters
Stacks them into a heartless pile
Douses them with gasoline
And turns it’s back on their screams as they burn the mind down.
Published 27th Nov 2022
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23rd Apr 2023 7:26pm
Been going through your catalogue and I like your writing, there is a sense of emotional honesty, the pacing is good. I'd suggest including more mise en scene or what I like to call imbued milieu. Describe the environment, haptics, create 3 dimensional images before the mind's eye that will express the emotion through the image.
24th Apr 2023 9:58am
First, I really appreciate your feedback. But I’m not a writer, just a verbal illustrator. I like the cryptic lyrical style of Maynard Keenan where it's up to the receiver to interpret as they need to, as will be useful for them. My only ambition is that one of my pieces finds one person somewhere, and it becomes theirs. It will forever mean more to that person than it ever meant to me. It’s lofty, but hey, gotta have goals.
I read a couple of your pieces and you’re a fine writer. Keep up the good work.
I read a couple of your pieces and you’re a fine writer. Keep up the good work.
