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the latitude of Longitude
Published 3rd Oct 2022
Author's Note
“A poem should have the touch ... the way sunlight falls on Braille.” .......silent lotus
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- Edited 12th Aug 2024 3:45am
3rd Oct 2022 3:48pm
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4th Oct 2022 1:01pm
dear Ted
thankyuuu
that's most gracious of you
for i know you too as a word whittler
who searches to share the essence of things
a warm autumn smile
silent lotus
thankyuuu
that's most gracious of you
for i know you too as a word whittler
who searches to share the essence of things
a warm autumn smile
silent lotus
3rd Oct 2022 9:04pm
Hello there
This was an intriguing little piece. The first line in reference to Sisters made me think of a woman’s place in the world. This kind of leads back to the title for me — that they are the latitude of longitude — the way.
“her postcards like blossoms from orchards” sounds like all of the wisdom they are carrying in the world.
Anyway, that’s just where the piece took me in my mind. And I have to say, I enjoyed it for the interpretation in my own mind over all.
I’d argue that “I’ve bared witness” sounds a little clunky grammar wise… I think I would have maybe opted for “I’ve bore witness” which feels a little smoother for the past tense. Just in the spirit of honest critique.
Thank you for sharing this little piece, it was certainly enjoyable to pick through.
-M
This was an intriguing little piece. The first line in reference to Sisters made me think of a woman’s place in the world. This kind of leads back to the title for me — that they are the latitude of longitude — the way.
“her postcards like blossoms from orchards” sounds like all of the wisdom they are carrying in the world.
Anyway, that’s just where the piece took me in my mind. And I have to say, I enjoyed it for the interpretation in my own mind over all.
I’d argue that “I’ve bared witness” sounds a little clunky grammar wise… I think I would have maybe opted for “I’ve bore witness” which feels a little smoother for the past tense. Just in the spirit of honest critique.
Thank you for sharing this little piece, it was certainly enjoyable to pick through.
-M
4th Oct 2022 1:14pm
dear Northern Soul
such kindness of reply brings light to the day
you are delightfully in sync with this p0etic whisper
and your honest critique i welcome with open arms
i'm truly grateful that your eye caught the exposure of 'bare'
which for my inkwell is how a truth when naked is no longer hidden
in that aura there is the hopefulness for womens' freedoms
a truly warm smile
silent lotus
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such kindness of reply brings light to the day
you are delightfully in sync with this p0etic whisper
and your honest critique i welcome with open arms
i'm truly grateful that your eye caught the exposure of 'bare'
which for my inkwell is how a truth when naked is no longer hidden
in that aura there is the hopefulness for womens' freedoms
a truly warm smile
silent lotus
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