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Hollow
I felt it in my chest, it started as a tickle. Then a pull. This sensation fills to my crest and almost spilling out. Creeping up my throat.
I am weak. My body shakes as the puling grows stronger and stronger until it turns to pain.
sweet soft pain, more like an ache.
My stomach turns as I stare at myself in the mirror. No one can see what I feel. I feel lighter and lighter each day that it eats at me.
I scream at myself from the inside but it only echoes until I can't hear it anymore. I go until I'm speechless. Each word tears a piece of my soul and waits I have no more words to give.
I am weak. My body shakes as the puling grows stronger and stronger until it turns to pain.
sweet soft pain, more like an ache.
My stomach turns as I stare at myself in the mirror. No one can see what I feel. I feel lighter and lighter each day that it eats at me.
I scream at myself from the inside but it only echoes until I can't hear it anymore. I go until I'm speechless. Each word tears a piece of my soul and waits I have no more words to give.
Published 17th Sep 2022
| Edited 22nd Mar 2023
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17th Sep 2022 10:08am
To me that this kind of feels like a battle with self and/or battles with images of self. I don't want to offend or misinterpret the intent, so these are just my first impressions.
It's brilliantly vague and yes, leaves it up to reader to take what we might from it, which I do deeply appreciate. You evoke well that sweet pain... the ache. The issue eating away, I felt could be irony or a possible metaphor...
Without certainty, I believe this piece could apply to so, so many emotional states or personal situations....
Either way, it was captivating and utterly pulled me in. Well done!
Thank you for sharing with us
and welcome to DUP :)
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B
It's brilliantly vague and yes, leaves it up to reader to take what we might from it, which I do deeply appreciate. You evoke well that sweet pain... the ache. The issue eating away, I felt could be irony or a possible metaphor...
Without certainty, I believe this piece could apply to so, so many emotional states or personal situations....
Either way, it was captivating and utterly pulled me in. Well done!
Thank you for sharing with us
and welcome to DUP :)
🌹 💙
B
17th Sep 2022 6:45pm
