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Ventana Pages
Peeking through the
Beaten path
Of smudged glass
With caked on specks
Of aged dirt
Searching for
A sign of myself
On the other
Side of the blur
Scrolled onto
My Ventana Pages
Where I spilled the fluid of
My soul with calloused fingers
Behind sheer curtains
Of contemplation
Inside all of my
Different bedrooms
Merging fear with
The beauty of words
Same wild midnight spirit
Unrecognizable with growth
Pondering who I am
Where am I going
Asking my reflection
Who tells me to look back
Crack open the written window
Breathe in fresh air
Be unafraid to read and turn
All the different ages
Of your Ventana Pages
Beaten path
Of smudged glass
With caked on specks
Of aged dirt
Searching for
A sign of myself
On the other
Side of the blur
Scrolled onto
My Ventana Pages
Where I spilled the fluid of
My soul with calloused fingers
Behind sheer curtains
Of contemplation
Inside all of my
Different bedrooms
Merging fear with
The beauty of words
Same wild midnight spirit
Unrecognizable with growth
Pondering who I am
Where am I going
Asking my reflection
Who tells me to look back
Crack open the written window
Breathe in fresh air
Be unafraid to read and turn
All the different ages
Of your Ventana Pages
Author's Note
Ventana is Spanish for window:)
Just an FYI
Where I am in life is so far from where I ever thought I would be.
Looking back at some older stuff in an odd way gives strength and direction
of where you want to be. Enjoy the travel.
Listening to Nora Jones - Traveling On
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ft37YlNi1pA
Just an FYI
Where I am in life is so far from where I ever thought I would be.
Looking back at some older stuff in an odd way gives strength and direction
of where you want to be. Enjoy the travel.
Listening to Nora Jones - Traveling On
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ft37YlNi1pA
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Re. Ventana Pages
11th Sep 2022 5:26am
Dear A,
Smudged glass and mirrors…love the visual. I get some of my greatest laughs and deepest regrets looking at old journals. I think reading your poem has loosened the grip of the dark stuff for me. It was very interesting taking this walk with you in this write. There were so many similarities in wondering who I am, what might I become, where do I be want to be? Not a single thing panned out but in the end it’s all good. Totally love the introspection in this write.
H🌷
Smudged glass and mirrors…love the visual. I get some of my greatest laughs and deepest regrets looking at old journals. I think reading your poem has loosened the grip of the dark stuff for me. It was very interesting taking this walk with you in this write. There were so many similarities in wondering who I am, what might I become, where do I be want to be? Not a single thing panned out but in the end it’s all good. Totally love the introspection in this write.
H🌷
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Hi H:)
A lot goes through my mind. At times I get a little lost. I do second
guess things. The choices I made at a younger age conflict with
me now. As it should - not the same person. I look at my boys and am so grateful for all the choices.
Good and bad. It sprouts wisdom - eventually:)
If I was able to help loosen the grip of some of your darker writings mission accomplished:) Nothing should have such a tight hold on you lovely.
Thanks for commenting and the RL!!!
A lot goes through my mind. At times I get a little lost. I do second
guess things. The choices I made at a younger age conflict with
me now. As it should - not the same person. I look at my boys and am so grateful for all the choices.
Good and bad. It sprouts wisdom - eventually:)
If I was able to help loosen the grip of some of your darker writings mission accomplished:) Nothing should have such a tight hold on you lovely.
Thanks for commenting and the RL!!!
Re. Ventana Pages
11th Sep 2022 5:56am
This flowed so freely, and quickly.
Just as the thoughts of where we are can grab us suddenly and then in the next instance we ponder, look back and look ahead. These thoughts and realizations about our journeys are so important. I agree with Honoria, great visuals! 🌹
Just as the thoughts of where we are can grab us suddenly and then in the next instance we ponder, look back and look ahead. These thoughts and realizations about our journeys are so important. I agree with Honoria, great visuals! 🌹
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11th Sep 2022 6:19pm
Hi NG:)
Looking back and remembering to take that leap into writing was very scary for me. Putting down your feelings and stages of life is daunting to say the least. Really being able to connect with yourself - training your brain to let go of the words and writing them down in a coherent manner was hard. Thoughts flow quickly - sooo true!!
So glad you enjoyed this write and the visuals.
Thank you for the RL and commenting:)
Have a great Sunday
Looking back and remembering to take that leap into writing was very scary for me. Putting down your feelings and stages of life is daunting to say the least. Really being able to connect with yourself - training your brain to let go of the words and writing them down in a coherent manner was hard. Thoughts flow quickly - sooo true!!
So glad you enjoyed this write and the visuals.
Thank you for the RL and commenting:)
Have a great Sunday
Re. Ventana Pages
I think this might be one of my favorite pieces of yours, A.
The beautiful and considerate way you creatively take the reader with you through the looking glass, back to reflect upon your history of written evolution is not only captivating it's 100% resonant. I love how you compare and contrast your growth and change along the way; it shows so much depth and lovely maturity. I was hooked with the clever choice of 'inside all my different bedrooms' - a spectacular piece of perfect imagery that immediately grabbed me; I couldn't help but connect it with writing in my own journals in all my various bedrooms that I've occupied throughout my life too, considering that's where a lot of my writing started out and still continues to this day.
The bit of soul searching and self-discovery you reveal, evokes well the underlying battle we sometimes have with reconciling and reflecting upon aging and what was, versus what now is. I deeply adored that conquering fears are much helped even still, by putting pen to paper.
That ending is fire...
"Crack open the written window
Breathe in fresh air
Be unafraid to read and turn
All the different ages
Of your Ventana Pages"
.... where possibilities can always remain endless...
I just loved this!
Superb ink, dear lady!
🌟 🌟🌟
-B
The beautiful and considerate way you creatively take the reader with you through the looking glass, back to reflect upon your history of written evolution is not only captivating it's 100% resonant. I love how you compare and contrast your growth and change along the way; it shows so much depth and lovely maturity. I was hooked with the clever choice of 'inside all my different bedrooms' - a spectacular piece of perfect imagery that immediately grabbed me; I couldn't help but connect it with writing in my own journals in all my various bedrooms that I've occupied throughout my life too, considering that's where a lot of my writing started out and still continues to this day.
The bit of soul searching and self-discovery you reveal, evokes well the underlying battle we sometimes have with reconciling and reflecting upon aging and what was, versus what now is. I deeply adored that conquering fears are much helped even still, by putting pen to paper.
That ending is fire...
"Crack open the written window
Breathe in fresh air
Be unafraid to read and turn
All the different ages
Of your Ventana Pages"
.... where possibilities can always remain endless...
I just loved this!
Superb ink, dear lady!
🌟 🌟🌟
-B
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Hi B:)
Great big toothy smile reading this comment and having you enjoy and relate so much to this. Coming of age and connecting with yourself and disconnecting through growth is inevitable.
I'm not sure if you listened to the song - it's a love song about traveling on with a loved one. I changed the perspective in my mind. It's a love song to yourself. Leaving your younger self behind but not too far. She's still traveling with you because she knows your going to be okay. Just taking everything in slower - in order to grow.
Hope that makes sense:)
On a lighter note -
I also write all of my poetry in my bedroom. Even in my
PJ's. Gotta be comfortable - so yeah - the bra comes off. heheheh
Thanks for the RL and commenting!!!
Have a great Day!!!
I'll be thinking about ya when I watch HOD!!
Great big toothy smile reading this comment and having you enjoy and relate so much to this. Coming of age and connecting with yourself and disconnecting through growth is inevitable.
I'm not sure if you listened to the song - it's a love song about traveling on with a loved one. I changed the perspective in my mind. It's a love song to yourself. Leaving your younger self behind but not too far. She's still traveling with you because she knows your going to be okay. Just taking everything in slower - in order to grow.
Hope that makes sense:)
On a lighter note -
I also write all of my poetry in my bedroom. Even in my
PJ's. Gotta be comfortable - so yeah - the bra comes off. heheheh
Thanks for the RL and commenting!!!
Have a great Day!!!
I'll be thinking about ya when I watch HOD!!
Re. Ventana Pages
11th Sep 2022 10:22am
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11th Sep 2022 6:36pm
Hey PS:)
Life lessons are a must!!
Gotta look back occasionally and play hopscotch. LOL
Skip it. Learned that lesson 10 years ago. hahahaha
So glad you enjoyed buddy
Thanks for the RL and commenting!!
Life lessons are a must!!
Gotta look back occasionally and play hopscotch. LOL
Skip it. Learned that lesson 10 years ago. hahahaha
So glad you enjoyed buddy
Thanks for the RL and commenting!!
Re. Ventana Pages
11th Sep 2022 12:23pm
A wonderful, constant burst of energy and sharp imagery, A...
Each like a chain reaction, prompting the next...
Each like a chain reaction, prompting the next...
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11th Sep 2022 6:42pm
Hi Cipher!!!
I'm so happy I could send you wonderful energy. Truly:)
It was a chain reaction when writing.
Just like you explained. LOL
I know I wanted to use the word Ventana. Love that word
for some reason. Feels so much more intimate than window.
So glad you enjoyed.
Thanks for the RL and commenting:)
I'm so happy I could send you wonderful energy. Truly:)
It was a chain reaction when writing.
Just like you explained. LOL
I know I wanted to use the word Ventana. Love that word
for some reason. Feels so much more intimate than window.
So glad you enjoyed.
Thanks for the RL and commenting:)
Re. Ventana Pages
11th Sep 2022 2:19pm
It's a different beauty we attain, not by what we want, but from what we did and from the hardship and the pain
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11th Sep 2022 6:45pm
Totally agree. Emotional pain is hard to heal.
Writing really helped me through a lot of messed up things.
It's always recognizable. Not this place again.
Each time handled a little better through grace and maturity:)
Thanks for stopping by and commenting:)
Writing really helped me through a lot of messed up things.
It's always recognizable. Not this place again.
Each time handled a little better through grace and maturity:)
Thanks for stopping by and commenting:)
Re. Ventana Pages
11th Sep 2022 11:02pm
Excellent write.
The author's notes were just as rewarding as well!
"The written window" what a great description. So simply done with a few words, yet epic. Home run!
This is a wonderful contemplative look back with you, as you lead the reader on a distinct literary path. Great job!
The author's notes were just as rewarding as well!
"The written window" what a great description. So simply done with a few words, yet epic. Home run!
This is a wonderful contemplative look back with you, as you lead the reader on a distinct literary path. Great job!
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Re: Re. Ventana Pages
12th Sep 2022 2:29am
Hey Scruffy;)
Thank you for the snaps on this buddy!!
Whether male or female I feel we all can connect through writing. We have a greater appreciation for what it takes to really sit down and build with our words.
I got an epic from you!!!
Looking back through our lives (for me at least) there are moments of epic proportion. LOL
Did I really live through that?
Thanks for the RL and commenting:)
Thank you for the snaps on this buddy!!
Whether male or female I feel we all can connect through writing. We have a greater appreciation for what it takes to really sit down and build with our words.
I got an epic from you!!!
Looking back through our lives (for me at least) there are moments of epic proportion. LOL
Did I really live through that?
Thanks for the RL and commenting:)
Re: Re. Ventana Pages
12th Sep 2022 2:39am
Omg, I ain't shaving clean! I'd look like I'm 12 years old! Then they'd block me from the "adult" content. Lol.
Ok, maybe not 12. Below 40?
Hey, your write is awesome! And yes, we are here for the appreciation and camaraderie through writing. Why else do it?
Have a good night, cheeks. Lol
Ok, maybe not 12. Below 40?
Hey, your write is awesome! And yes, we are here for the appreciation and camaraderie through writing. Why else do it?
Have a good night, cheeks. Lol
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Re: Re. Ventana Pages
12th Sep 2022 2:50am
OMG - Please don't shave!!
Totally busting your chops. LOL
Can't imagine you looking twelve.
Me on the other hand - yes - I still get carded!!!
When I have cut my hair into a bob I look 12 -cause I'm short.
OK maybe 15. No joke.
Maybe a little over developed for 15 - but yes- I can swing it. LOL
Good Night Scruffy. LOL
Also meant to tell you - cool avatar.
Especially on today:)
Totally busting your chops. LOL
Can't imagine you looking twelve.
Me on the other hand - yes - I still get carded!!!
When I have cut my hair into a bob I look 12 -cause I'm short.
OK maybe 15. No joke.
Maybe a little over developed for 15 - but yes- I can swing it. LOL
Good Night Scruffy. LOL
Also meant to tell you - cool avatar.
Especially on today:)
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12th Sep 2022 3:01am
The avatar was hastily drawn for today's purpose. I was going to find one, but figured if i drew one, it makes it more personable.
Thanks for noticing it.
Btw, sometimes getting carded is just to get your name, your area. Not simply your age. And very very rarely your address (harder to memorize quickly).
You're welcome. Lol.
Thanks for noticing it.
Btw, sometimes getting carded is just to get your name, your area. Not simply your age. And very very rarely your address (harder to memorize quickly).
You're welcome. Lol.
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14th Sep 2022 00:38am
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14th Sep 2022 1:50am
Also, actually, if you want more of a scoop... When they use their phone flashlight to illuminate your I.D., the door man or bartender, sometimes they are also taking a picture of it. So watch them!
It's all mostly safe, 99.9 percent of the time. But be careful nonetheless.
It's all mostly safe, 99.9 percent of the time. But be careful nonetheless.
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Re: Re. Ventana Pages
14th Sep 2022 1:54am
Uuugghhh. That's scary honestly. Only time I get carded is
out of town. Everyone else knows me where I live. Not an issue then.
But thank you!!!
out of town. Everyone else knows me where I live. Not an issue then.
But thank you!!!
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Re: Re. Ventana Pages
15th Oct 2022 8:51pm
Hey you - hahaha
Thank you so much for making my Saturday with this
excellent comment. (You also said excellent twice!!!)
Big toothy smile right now.
Thanks for the RL and the excellent comment. LOL
Thank you so much for making my Saturday with this
excellent comment. (You also said excellent twice!!!)
Big toothy smile right now.
Thanks for the RL and the excellent comment. LOL