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Corinna
So you finally got an Italian husband,
who bought you a little large ship.
And you get to see your name upon it
when you stroll (behind him)
down the dock.
Maybe this time it will be taken out,
instead of just a floating table
for friends and drinks.
Maybe he will say yes
when you ask to steer it.
He won't, no matter how
you rub your tits against his.
No matter how wide the ocean is.
Only your name sees
the front of the ship.
But damn if it doesn't look good
in the harbor.
I took to dating again.
The second one from our old cafe.
She works there though.
Nice enough, pleasant eyes.
She's still new,
you can tell by
how high she buttons her blouse.
Red bra, her white shirt
tempts it to pink,
like baby rabbits.
Calm ones, but I think of
one day they'll be bounding.
Then I will gather them
and go through motions
of devouring them.
Hoarding them,
all to myself.
So, you go, set sail with Philippe.
All of the asses of boats
look the same from here.
Not much is impressive
from this perspective.
Still, Corinna has learned to stand
between me and the view of the harbor,
when she takes my order.
I tell her all the time
that it doesn't bother me.
I'm not paying attention at all
to what is leaving out there.
Today, she undid her top button.
After her shift, we're going swimming.
I've no doubt she'll wear
something modest
and try to conceal the wear and tear
of kids and husbands.
Or car crashes and boyfriends.
I've read them all by now,
just the titles are different.
Maybe we will snorkel at the reef
and grab anything green or gold.
I notice now, how exact that is
to the color of her eyes.
No need for shades like you wear
-those chrome tire rims for sunglasses.
Because you had to have something
to prove you went to Milan.
To prove that Philippe showed
his love to you.
Or, that gaudy ring, that will drown you
if you fall (tossed) overboard.
You can stare at it
as it leads you to the bottom of the sea.
Take some advice, just in case,
smile open mouthed as you sink.
You will suffer less,
and I hate to think
how long can that minute be;
Holding your breath,
as you think of
what wasn't meant to be
like this.
Me and Corinna are at the cove now.
All the locals are here.
Angel has his guitar
and Brenda is beading
Rene's hair.
Salt water makes it so frizzy,
but she's our best diver.
She found a coin once.
It's now on a necklace.
It's silver, and we're all
still pretty impressed.
~~~
Published 17th Aug 2022
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17th Aug 2022 2:26am
Wow. This piece is rough. In her mind she went for greener pastures and
got stuck with a sinking ship. Probably will never leave either. In the meantime
he saved himself and jumped off:)
Time can heal but it doesn't erase. Feeling your partner thinks you unworthy of her
affections due to money or prestige just sucks.
Honestly, it's hard to believe anyone would want to be involved with someone with that
much power over you. Their whim decides if you'll be having a good day or not.
Not letting her steer the ship. What a douche - but she should have seen it coming.
The ending is perfect. Everything was free.
The friends - the music - the salt water frizzy hair (my personal fav)
Starting over is invigorating. Like a breath of fresh air amigo:)
Rooting for Corinne and her pink bunnies.
But gotta be honest - I might jack the Milan sunglasses (just saying)
Lots of relatable subject matter in this.
In both perspectives.
got stuck with a sinking ship. Probably will never leave either. In the meantime
he saved himself and jumped off:)
Time can heal but it doesn't erase. Feeling your partner thinks you unworthy of her
affections due to money or prestige just sucks.
Honestly, it's hard to believe anyone would want to be involved with someone with that
much power over you. Their whim decides if you'll be having a good day or not.
Not letting her steer the ship. What a douche - but she should have seen it coming.
The ending is perfect. Everything was free.
The friends - the music - the salt water frizzy hair (my personal fav)
Starting over is invigorating. Like a breath of fresh air amigo:)
Rooting for Corinne and her pink bunnies.
But gotta be honest - I might jack the Milan sunglasses (just saying)
Lots of relatable subject matter in this.
In both perspectives.
17th Aug 2022 2:43am
How was that dinner you made. (I had beef and rice. Yum)
This write of mine is totally fiction. I had an idea of what I wanted to write about, and it was nothing like this! But, this is cool. I don't know what led to it. Maybe something I read. I just start getting the scenes playing out in my head, and jot them down.
Although ages ago I did date a woman who had left her millionaire husband. She had a lot of goodies to sell and I managed a jewelry store.
We didn't date long. I actually realised that I didn't like her very much. Prima Donna attitude. Her alimony was $100,000 a year. And he got the two kids!
What a life, I guess.
This write of mine is totally fiction. I had an idea of what I wanted to write about, and it was nothing like this! But, this is cool. I don't know what led to it. Maybe something I read. I just start getting the scenes playing out in my head, and jot them down.
Although ages ago I did date a woman who had left her millionaire husband. She had a lot of goodies to sell and I managed a jewelry store.
We didn't date long. I actually realised that I didn't like her very much. Prima Donna attitude. Her alimony was $100,000 a year. And he got the two kids!
What a life, I guess.
17th Aug 2022 4:34am
This is one of those musings where the stanzas stand on their own, yet, they are somehow connected in the most beguiling way. You tell a beautiful story and reading your works of arts places you in the midst of words, and once you get down to the last paragraph you realize everything is interlocked whereas your ponders contains its own merit of sweet joy in the morning
Very nicely composed, my poet...
Very nicely composed, my poet...
19th Aug 2022 1:43am
What a nice, introspective comment. Thank you!
I managed to write a (unpublished) novel once. Only two people ever saw it. They were positive about it. But, I ended up destroying it. I don't even remember why now. I was frustrated I guess. It wasn't good enough and I knew it. But, I should have saved it and used it as a rough draft for a better one. Oh well.
Next time, is just short stories and so-called poems of mine.
I truly appreciate your comment. This poem was a very fast write that flew out on its own. And I don't want to hack it up.
I managed to write a (unpublished) novel once. Only two people ever saw it. They were positive about it. But, I ended up destroying it. I don't even remember why now. I was frustrated I guess. It wasn't good enough and I knew it. But, I should have saved it and used it as a rough draft for a better one. Oh well.
Next time, is just short stories and so-called poems of mine.
I truly appreciate your comment. This poem was a very fast write that flew out on its own. And I don't want to hack it up.
19th Aug 2022 1:58am
Back up.. you wrote a published novel and you destroyed it oh no.
I have read your enticing, engaging, and beguiling musings, and it could not have been worse, then when I published my first novel, years ago it was a self-published novel.., without an editor, or a reputable publishing company.
It had so many errors, I had to tell the library to pull them off the shelves, there were twenty-five novels they ordered in all... and I had to pay for the revisions and to pay for them to be restocked in the libraires. That was a very hard lesson worth learning... I laugh now..
Write another one, or as you said a short story, or even a poetry book... if you need assistance, I will shadow edit it, if you like
Enjoy your evening, my poet
I have read your enticing, engaging, and beguiling musings, and it could not have been worse, then when I published my first novel, years ago it was a self-published novel.., without an editor, or a reputable publishing company.
It had so many errors, I had to tell the library to pull them off the shelves, there were twenty-five novels they ordered in all... and I had to pay for the revisions and to pay for them to be restocked in the libraires. That was a very hard lesson worth learning... I laugh now..
Write another one, or as you said a short story, or even a poetry book... if you need assistance, I will shadow edit it, if you like
Enjoy your evening, my poet
19th Aug 2022 2:08am
No no, Unpublished. It was my "final" draft, to submit to publishing. It was actually through a program for certain writers, that I qualified for.
I also didn't realize how ignorant I was to the process.
But, I got upset over too many things at once, at the time. So everything got dumped in my life. Lol.
And yes, I want to try again before too long. And I am not too proud to ask for help!
I also didn't realize how ignorant I was to the process.
But, I got upset over too many things at once, at the time. So everything got dumped in my life. Lol.
And yes, I want to try again before too long. And I am not too proud to ask for help!
19th Aug 2022 2:13am
That is what I meant... 'unpublished.'. I was typing too fast.. That is why I said backup... sorry for the confusion
17th Aug 2022 4:48am
Dear S,
Eeekkk, I know quite a few people in this situation. A trade off of glittery stuff for their souls.
You’ve developed the story line wonderfully. Corrinna as the heroine, is understated yet stately. Guarded but ready to let loose when the time is right. Surrounding scene is excellent. Love the beach locale and vibe.
Watch out for those Italian men. 🙄 I’ll think about that sometimes. Trading my own happiness for stuff. You always think it’s no big deal but it’s a big deal. Inevitably the sparkle wears off the toys.
A write worth waiting for. Well done. H🌷
Eeekkk, I know quite a few people in this situation. A trade off of glittery stuff for their souls.
You’ve developed the story line wonderfully. Corrinna as the heroine, is understated yet stately. Guarded but ready to let loose when the time is right. Surrounding scene is excellent. Love the beach locale and vibe.
Watch out for those Italian men. 🙄 I’ll think about that sometimes. Trading my own happiness for stuff. You always think it’s no big deal but it’s a big deal. Inevitably the sparkle wears off the toys.
A write worth waiting for. Well done. H🌷
19th Aug 2022 1:52am
Thank you H, for your on the money view, especially about "Corinna".
I didnt want her to be like a rebound thing, but to stand on her own merits. I also didn't want to drag this write out into great lengths, like i tend to do. So character-build was kept in check, I think.
I'm learning as I go. Like everyone else.
I appreciate your insight.
I didnt want her to be like a rebound thing, but to stand on her own merits. I also didn't want to drag this write out into great lengths, like i tend to do. So character-build was kept in check, I think.
I'm learning as I go. Like everyone else.
I appreciate your insight.
17th Aug 2022 6:30pm
Wow
There you go telling stories again
Totally believable
Really dig this write
BIG LIKE
RL AWARD
There you go telling stories again
Totally believable
Really dig this write
BIG LIKE
RL AWARD
19th Aug 2022 1:57am
Of course it's believable, I shot the unicorn the day before, so it didn't make it to the story. Lol.
This write came out as is, I had no idea where from. But, probably a mix of things I read, and was thinking. And then the mental wheels dig in...
I like your big likes! It's motivating. Thank you!
This write came out as is, I had no idea where from. But, probably a mix of things I read, and was thinking. And then the mental wheels dig in...
I like your big likes! It's motivating. Thank you!
Anonymous
18th Aug 2022 1:49am
I really enjoyed the poem--the wit, the cleverness, the sharp use of imagery.
I like both the barbed comments directed to the ex, and the deprecatory self-regard that borders on weary cynicism.
Enjoyed!
I like both the barbed comments directed to the ex, and the deprecatory self-regard that borders on weary cynicism.
Enjoyed!
19th Aug 2022 2:02am
Thank you, Mr P.
I'm good with some aspects of writing, and not good with some others. But, I try to make it entertaining for the reader. Perhaps more improv than a Vegas stage. Lol.
I simply enjoy this for the sake of writing. It's enough for me, for now.
Thank you again for your kind reply!
I'm good with some aspects of writing, and not good with some others. But, I try to make it entertaining for the reader. Perhaps more improv than a Vegas stage. Lol.
I simply enjoy this for the sake of writing. It's enough for me, for now.
Thank you again for your kind reply!
19th Aug 2022 6:48pm
Hi, both Marks in one place!
Mr Styx... you're such a good storyteller! I was convinced these people were real! I can't wait for your actual book. Let us all know when it happens, because I NEED it!
Mr Styx... you're such a good storyteller! I was convinced these people were real! I can't wait for your actual book. Let us all know when it happens, because I NEED it!
20th Aug 2022 4:19pm
Hello Ellie!
Actually I think there are four Marks in here. We try to spread out so it doesn't look like a gang. Lol.
I am lazy, when it comes to putting all of my meandering writing into one pile. Every time I start to, I end up hacking at a few writes included. Which just prolongs the process.
Then I get frustrated and leave the room. Lol. I have a computer and desk, etc, in a back room. But, I tend to do all writing, etc, on my back porch, using a tablet.
I'm hopeless. Lol
But Dammit it will happen.
Thank you for the encouragement ! Bring a whip! I need forceful guidance I think. I just get too sidetracked.
Actually I think there are four Marks in here. We try to spread out so it doesn't look like a gang. Lol.
I am lazy, when it comes to putting all of my meandering writing into one pile. Every time I start to, I end up hacking at a few writes included. Which just prolongs the process.
Then I get frustrated and leave the room. Lol. I have a computer and desk, etc, in a back room. But, I tend to do all writing, etc, on my back porch, using a tablet.
I'm hopeless. Lol
But Dammit it will happen.
Thank you for the encouragement ! Bring a whip! I need forceful guidance I think. I just get too sidetracked.
20th Aug 2022 4:22pm
Well sort it out then!!! I am good at nagging, if required.
I write in bed quite often. Also in the middle of eating dinner, on post-it notes, old envelopes or whatever is to hand. Sometimes I get it all organised, and sometimes not!
I write in bed quite often. Also in the middle of eating dinner, on post-it notes, old envelopes or whatever is to hand. Sometimes I get it all organised, and sometimes not!
20th Aug 2022 4:38pm
