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last words
if
you
died
roses
would lose
lustre
ink
would
run dry
songs
would
fade away
joy would
turn to grey
days
would drag
of sorrow
words
would stop
formation
imagination
would cease it's wonder
everything
would
turn to stone
motions
would stall
and slow
ache so heavy
would be
all I know
only
emptiness
and my last words
would be
what remain
forever
unsaid
.
.
.
.
if
you
were dead
if
you
died
roses
would lose
lustre
ink
would
run dry
songs
would
fade away
joy would
turn to grey
days
would drag
of sorrow
words
would stop
formation
imagination
would cease it's wonder
everything
would
turn to stone
motions
would stall
and slow
ache so heavy
would be
all I know
only
emptiness
and my last words
would be
what remain
forever
unsaid
.
.
.
.
if
you
were dead
Written by
Bluevelvete
Published 23rd Jun 2022
Author's Note
Yesterday's post for AP's Those Dark Depressive Days forum and prompted by his own poem.
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23rd Jun 2022 11:29am
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23rd Jun 2022 12:12pm
Very nice. These lines so captured the finality of death. Imagination ceasing its wonder seemed to capture the tragedy of death.
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23rd Jun 2022 2:32pm
Thanks for the visit, LV.
It's always a pleasure to see where your thoughts lie... and get a sense of how I did by what your takeaway was.... It's so o helpful and deeply appreciated!
I'm glad you could feel a bit of the emergent sense of tragedy... that was indeed an emotion I tried to convey....
Much obliged
I'm grateful for your visit 🙏
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It's always a pleasure to see where your thoughts lie... and get a sense of how I did by what your takeaway was.... It's so o helpful and deeply appreciated!
I'm glad you could feel a bit of the emergent sense of tragedy... that was indeed an emotion I tried to convey....
Much obliged
I'm grateful for your visit 🙏
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23rd Jun 2022 2:25pm
Thanks, Jay.
Your eyes on my work mean a lot to me.
It's lovely to hear your feedback and I appreciate you taking the time.
Be well, dear friend.
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Your eyes on my work mean a lot to me.
It's lovely to hear your feedback and I appreciate you taking the time.
Be well, dear friend.
🌹 - 💙
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23rd Jun 2022 2:11pm
Nice lovely words. But we also need to go out with are boots on 😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘.
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23rd Jun 2022 2:26pm
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24th Jun 2022 1:22am
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23rd Jun 2022 2:50pm
Dear BV,
Don’t fret, I’m still here! 😊
Hehe just kidding. Now I’m serious. 🤔
This is beautiful. I can only imagine how awful it might be to have someone go without a last “I love you”. I found this poem breath-y in a lovely way as to emote the sadness and grief one would feel at such loss. I never stop admiring your talent for capturing the true essence on an emotion or situation. H🌷
Don’t fret, I’m still here! 😊
Hehe just kidding. Now I’m serious. 🤔
This is beautiful. I can only imagine how awful it might be to have someone go without a last “I love you”. I found this poem breath-y in a lovely way as to emote the sadness and grief one would feel at such loss. I never stop admiring your talent for capturing the true essence on an emotion or situation. H🌷
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Honoria!! There she is!!
Yes, I have missed you, how'd you know?!?!
I must be that obvious.. ;)
This piece is dear to my heart and comes from a place of abundant truth, cherished love and a deep understanding of how it tears away parts of your own soul to lose someone you deeply care about to suicide, being left behind not able to say what what was needed to be said .... being ROBBED of that opportunity. It is a brutal scar that emits pain anger and guilt in neverending streams. You just learn how to live with the flow.
I also wanted to put a piece out there that could really highlight well to anyone feeling like self harm is an answer, a honest view of what the carnage looks like they're completing leaving behind...as well as the deep love that's here in droves for them if only they could cleary see enough to stay.
My hope, was to leave that type of indelible mark.
I deeply enjoy the depths in which you see me, dear lady. I always marvel at your observational talents and feel lucky to have them highlight me from time to time. Your light and kindness make a difference. Deepest thanks for the heartfelt comments, it means the world to me that you leave them.
(sorry if this was a little too deep of a share...)
Until next time - 💙
(please don't let it be as long!!!)
🌹 - B
Yes, I have missed you, how'd you know?!?!
I must be that obvious.. ;)
This piece is dear to my heart and comes from a place of abundant truth, cherished love and a deep understanding of how it tears away parts of your own soul to lose someone you deeply care about to suicide, being left behind not able to say what what was needed to be said .... being ROBBED of that opportunity. It is a brutal scar that emits pain anger and guilt in neverending streams. You just learn how to live with the flow.
I also wanted to put a piece out there that could really highlight well to anyone feeling like self harm is an answer, a honest view of what the carnage looks like they're completing leaving behind...as well as the deep love that's here in droves for them if only they could cleary see enough to stay.
My hope, was to leave that type of indelible mark.
I deeply enjoy the depths in which you see me, dear lady. I always marvel at your observational talents and feel lucky to have them highlight me from time to time. Your light and kindness make a difference. Deepest thanks for the heartfelt comments, it means the world to me that you leave them.
(sorry if this was a little too deep of a share...)
Until next time - 💙
(please don't let it be as long!!!)
🌹 - B
Anonymous
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23rd Jun 2022 5:37pm
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You're deeply in tune, dear Rianne.
Much more lies underneath the first glance of his poem... it's very true. For me, it's a love letter never sent. A beacon for those who need to be reminded of their own value and how much love and opportunity still awaits and exists for them, despite any current state of their painful 'now'. It's also a reminder to myself that I can't harbor anger and guilt in the amount that I sometimes do; to give myself a break, even if I don't always believe that I might be deserving.
It's uncanny that you picked up upon some of my underlying inspirations, yet I'm not surprised. We're definitely connected to one another on some level, we witchy ladies!! .. lol... *wink!
Your kind words and generous contemplations here with me are truly truly appreciated.
Thank you, my friend
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B
Much more lies underneath the first glance of his poem... it's very true. For me, it's a love letter never sent. A beacon for those who need to be reminded of their own value and how much love and opportunity still awaits and exists for them, despite any current state of their painful 'now'. It's also a reminder to myself that I can't harbor anger and guilt in the amount that I sometimes do; to give myself a break, even if I don't always believe that I might be deserving.
It's uncanny that you picked up upon some of my underlying inspirations, yet I'm not surprised. We're definitely connected to one another on some level, we witchy ladies!! .. lol... *wink!
Your kind words and generous contemplations here with me are truly truly appreciated.
Thank you, my friend
🌹 - 💙
B
Anonymous
- Edited 29th May 2023 7:45am
24th Jun 2022 8:14am
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25th Jun 2022 6:39pm
Dearest lady,
I'm so grateful to you for leaving me this follow up message. I read it yesterday and just needed to let it sit so I could think on it before responding. You using your innate spirituality to locate or feel me and my essence and a level within my writing that is reactive and potentially tapping into something else, mystic.. well that's like seeing the sunrise, to me. I'm usually so hard on myself that yes oftentimes difficult to find a positive. It means a lot to have you point out your thoughts and what it is you're feeling, especially within my moments of emotional upheaval. I'm left renewed and just made to feel lighter, seen and supported. I think there's a lovely give-and-take there too because there's obviously reasons why I'm so drawing to the experience of your poems and spoken word recordings, I am proud of that line kinship and felt natural awareness. It's validation and a motivation to continue on a path that expresses growth and knowledge. My appreciation runs deep and sincere.
Thank you, again.
🌹 - 💙
x
I'm so grateful to you for leaving me this follow up message. I read it yesterday and just needed to let it sit so I could think on it before responding. You using your innate spirituality to locate or feel me and my essence and a level within my writing that is reactive and potentially tapping into something else, mystic.. well that's like seeing the sunrise, to me. I'm usually so hard on myself that yes oftentimes difficult to find a positive. It means a lot to have you point out your thoughts and what it is you're feeling, especially within my moments of emotional upheaval. I'm left renewed and just made to feel lighter, seen and supported. I think there's a lovely give-and-take there too because there's obviously reasons why I'm so drawing to the experience of your poems and spoken word recordings, I am proud of that line kinship and felt natural awareness. It's validation and a motivation to continue on a path that expresses growth and knowledge. My appreciation runs deep and sincere.
Thank you, again.
🌹 - 💙
x
Anonymous
- Edited 29th May 2023 7:45am
26th Jun 2022 8:33am
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Wow, Lady Blue
Okay okay you've convinced me to stick around🥰 You so succinctly encapsulate grief with these profound words.
Bravissima!
XXXOOO
Bob
Okay okay you've convinced me to stick around🥰 You so succinctly encapsulate grief with these profound words.
Bravissima!
XXXOOO
Bob
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Your unexpected and absolutely soul reviving visit had me all a flutter with BB excitement today!! I'm hopeful that you will stop in with frequency!! I adore hearing from you, there's nothing like your insight to learn from and enjoy.
A true climax (heh heh) of my day!
Thank you for taking the time to leave your thoughts on this one. This is piece that's extremely meaningful and enormous emotional for me, so your comments are that much more profound felt.
I can't wait to see more of you and perhaps read some new poem posts, too?!? .. lol.
Much love and loads of smiles at your return.
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A true climax (heh heh) of my day!
Thank you for taking the time to leave your thoughts on this one. This is piece that's extremely meaningful and enormous emotional for me, so your comments are that much more profound felt.
I can't wait to see more of you and perhaps read some new poem posts, too?!? .. lol.
Much love and loads of smiles at your return.
🌹 - 💙
🐻💞🐰
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24th Jun 2022 6:28am
Just needed to reiterate how much I adore your return....please continue to visit!
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24th Jun 2022 5:55pm
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23rd Jun 2022 8:10pm
This reminds me of times when I couldn't say to people what I wanted to say. Really beautiful words.
James
James
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That's such a sad moment of reflection, too.....to not have been able to say what needed saying.... it ends up haunting you, in the end.... I know it well.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me, James.... You voice such truth and shear away everything else. I adore that.
Don't be a stranger...
🌹 - B
x
Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me, James.... You voice such truth and shear away everything else. I adore that.
Don't be a stranger...
🌹 - B
x
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Thanks for saying so, L.
I appreciate you taking the time to leave your thoughts. It's always wonderful to hear from you.
Much obliged,
🌹 - B
I appreciate you taking the time to leave your thoughts. It's always wonderful to hear from you.
Much obliged,
🌹 - B
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24th Jun 2022 1:25am
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Dear friend,
Your thoughts and insights upon my page leave me appreciative and grateful. I am glad you were able to feel what you did. That's something that will stick with me as a very good thing to come out of something penned from a place inside me that's so dark and personal.
Thank you for taking the time, for the generous list add and for all your warmth and light you selflessly share with me.... it's never taken for granted.
Much love and kind wishes sent your way ✨
🌹 - 💙
B
Your thoughts and insights upon my page leave me appreciative and grateful. I am glad you were able to feel what you did. That's something that will stick with me as a very good thing to come out of something penned from a place inside me that's so dark and personal.
Thank you for taking the time, for the generous list add and for all your warmth and light you selflessly share with me.... it's never taken for granted.
Much love and kind wishes sent your way ✨
🌹 - 💙
B
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24th Jun 2022 7:33am
As the years go by more people I know die or get sick. My mother in law is very sick at the moment and she is one of those people I couldn't imagine life without. Seems the family revolves around her. This reminds me of that and how special those people are.
Wonderful ink my friend 😁
Wonderful ink my friend 😁
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24th Jun 2022 6:23pm
DC,
My heart goes out to you, your wife and all your family. Your mother in law sounds like a wonderful beacon and truly good lady. I'm sorry for her and you all that she's battling sickness. It's difficult at best and a horror at worst. She's lucky to have you both with her and you're so correct that it becomes about the cherished memories left and the ability to let those you love most know exactly how and why, while they're here. Never waste a moment never feel like you can wait until tomorrow. Be present and proactive (even if it feels silly) and let anyone who you care about know you do and why... never leaving doubts.
Sending well wishes for peace and comfort to you and yours.
Thank you for sharing your generous thoughts with me, my friend... I am enormously grateful.
🌹 - B
My heart goes out to you, your wife and all your family. Your mother in law sounds like a wonderful beacon and truly good lady. I'm sorry for her and you all that she's battling sickness. It's difficult at best and a horror at worst. She's lucky to have you both with her and you're so correct that it becomes about the cherished memories left and the ability to let those you love most know exactly how and why, while they're here. Never waste a moment never feel like you can wait until tomorrow. Be present and proactive (even if it feels silly) and let anyone who you care about know you do and why... never leaving doubts.
Sending well wishes for peace and comfort to you and yours.
Thank you for sharing your generous thoughts with me, my friend... I am enormously grateful.
🌹 - B
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24th Jun 2022 6:04pm
Meganne,
Your lovely visit really had an incredible impact on me and I deeply enjoyed seeing you. I always read your poetry and am oftentimes too overwhelmed by it's extremely personal nature to feel like I'm able to adequately leave my own thoughts, in a way that I feel doesn't detract from your beautiful honest penning. Just wanted to let you know that I'm there reading and very much appreciating, from the shadows.
I'm so grateful that you found something here within this piece, as it's an extremely important and emotional poem for me.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, for your generous list add and all you contribute here.
It was a treat to have you visit 🦋
🌹B
Your lovely visit really had an incredible impact on me and I deeply enjoyed seeing you. I always read your poetry and am oftentimes too overwhelmed by it's extremely personal nature to feel like I'm able to adequately leave my own thoughts, in a way that I feel doesn't detract from your beautiful honest penning. Just wanted to let you know that I'm there reading and very much appreciating, from the shadows.
I'm so grateful that you found something here within this piece, as it's an extremely important and emotional poem for me.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, for your generous list add and all you contribute here.
It was a treat to have you visit 🦋
🌹B
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25th Jun 2022 6:53pm
Awww wow, my own secret admirer! I'm so honored that you find my pieces so powerful!
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my pieces!
To be honest I felt the same way about this piece. The word phenomenal is the only thought I could adequately use to describe how I felt when I read it!
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my pieces!
To be honest I felt the same way about this piece. The word phenomenal is the only thought I could adequately use to describe how I felt when I read it!
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26th Jun 2022 10:03am
hahaha... I suppose I am a bit of lurker! 🙋🏻♀️
I do find your very powerful, real, human and vulnerable in a good way.... gutsy.
It's rare to find that combination that's so captivating. So, yes... I admire 100%!
Hopefully now that the cat is out of the bag, I'll try to make sure to leave my rambling thoughts more often without feeling like 🤤🥴😜.... ha!
Thanks again, M
Regards,
🌹 - B
I do find your very powerful, real, human and vulnerable in a good way.... gutsy.
It's rare to find that combination that's so captivating. So, yes... I admire 100%!
Hopefully now that the cat is out of the bag, I'll try to make sure to leave my rambling thoughts more often without feeling like 🤤🥴😜.... ha!
Thanks again, M
Regards,
🌹 - B
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26th Jun 2022 9:49pm
I look forward to reading your thoughts more often! You are such a beautiful soul! ♥️
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24th Jun 2022 12:41pm
Wow... powerful... unrelenting in its truth... so resonate with me right now...
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24th Jun 2022 6:13pm
Thanks so much LilD.
I'm terrifically grateful for the kind words. This one weighs very emotionally heavy for me, so I deeply appreciate that it resonated and you felt that was conveyed... sending out warm thoughts of solidarity, in your shared understanding...
I'm grateful you're here, my friend.
Hope you are ok and doing well.
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B
I'm terrifically grateful for the kind words. This one weighs very emotionally heavy for me, so I deeply appreciate that it resonated and you felt that was conveyed... sending out warm thoughts of solidarity, in your shared understanding...
I'm grateful you're here, my friend.
Hope you are ok and doing well.
🌹 - 💙
B
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24th Jun 2022 6:49pm
lol...
Thanks for the lovely sentiments
Missed you.
Good to have you drop in.
🌹 - B
xo
Thanks for the lovely sentiments
Missed you.
Good to have you drop in.
🌹 - B
xo
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24th Jun 2022 7:19pm
btw, it's not all doom and gloom either....
just this piece.
Anyway, I hope you don't die either... lol.
again, thanks
just this piece.
Anyway, I hope you don't die either... lol.
again, thanks
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24th Jun 2022 7:29pm
Dawww... the best compliment I've had in awhile.... now I really really miss you and your visits... hahaha.
You should look into some new poems from old members returned as well as a few new members... if you haven't already...
You might appreciate the writing quality...
You should look into some new poems from old members returned as well as a few new members... if you haven't already...
You might appreciate the writing quality...
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24th Jun 2022 9:02pm
Aah... What can i say... You are simply amazing, dear poetess... Fantastic poem!!! 😊🌹😊
Thanks for sharing :)
Thanks for sharing :)
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25th Jun 2022 5:42am
ohh my!!
What a pleasure to see you, InDreamz🦋
I'm so glad you enjoyed my little poem and took the time to leave your thoughts and generous list add.
I'm always so happy when you share your beautifully infectious spirit with me, I feel rejuvenated and I'm all smiles.
Much thanks for the kind words-🙏
Much love and deep appreciation,
🌹 - B
What a pleasure to see you, InDreamz🦋
I'm so glad you enjoyed my little poem and took the time to leave your thoughts and generous list add.
I'm always so happy when you share your beautifully infectious spirit with me, I feel rejuvenated and I'm all smiles.
Much thanks for the kind words-🙏
Much love and deep appreciation,
🌹 - B
Wow!
25th Jun 2022 3:47am
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25th Jun 2022 4:14am
Hey there, :)
Thank you so much for stopping by and for leaving me your thoughts. I'm glad you felt an emotional reaction and found some beauty here.
Welcome to DUP"
It's nice to meet you; I look forward to reading your poetry as well.
I hope you enjoy your time with us.
🌹 - B
Thank you so much for stopping by and for leaving me your thoughts. I'm glad you felt an emotional reaction and found some beauty here.
Welcome to DUP"
It's nice to meet you; I look forward to reading your poetry as well.
I hope you enjoy your time with us.
🌹 - B
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25th Jun 2022 4:19am
Aww, thank you, you’re so sweet, I am loving it here, and it’s very nice to meet you as well. ♥️
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25th Jun 2022 2:17pm
Your visit and those comments are more than enough for me.....
You. are. lovely.
Thank you so much.
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You. are. lovely.
Thank you so much.
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x
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28th Jun 2022 11:44pm
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Your range is impressive. Can be uplifting and bright like the most luminous star and yet can go deep into pitch darkness (like a black hole).
I hope the "Self-harm" tag was not identifying you - as that would not be an acceptable loss. Your poem conveys the tear in one's soul when a loved one is lost, and the finality of not being able to communicate your true feeling for them. However, your poem ends with "..If you were dead". As the reader, I recognize you still have a chance to share your feelings...but alas will you? Your words convey "in the moment" we hesitate to share our feelings, and later regret it because the opportunity is gone.
A haunting "great work".
I hope the "Self-harm" tag was not identifying you - as that would not be an acceptable loss. Your poem conveys the tear in one's soul when a loved one is lost, and the finality of not being able to communicate your true feeling for them. However, your poem ends with "..If you were dead". As the reader, I recognize you still have a chance to share your feelings...but alas will you? Your words convey "in the moment" we hesitate to share our feelings, and later regret it because the opportunity is gone.
A haunting "great work".
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You're so incredibly in tune... It's essentially a love letter of sorts, letting the intended person know in the here and now, just how huge of an affect and enormous hole they'd leave.... if they were to hurt themselves and die. No, the self harm tag wasn't about me.... and yes, the intended poem recipient is fine.
I know people are complex and that mental health issues are difficult to navigate but I also feel like sometimes people get so lost within their own pain that they can very quickly lose sight of how loved and cherished they are, and essentially do something rash they can never undo.
I've lost someone to suicide, it's utterly horrific to be left behind with such guilt and pain, the kind that'll never subside, you just get used to and learn how to go on living with it. It forces a new reality.
I was speaking many truths, from multiple life occurrences, when writing this one.
I'm so grateful you're here... I missed you and thank you for all your visits and the love you've shown and gloriously continue to
It means a lot to me, my lovely lion.
Thank you thank you.
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I know people are complex and that mental health issues are difficult to navigate but I also feel like sometimes people get so lost within their own pain that they can very quickly lose sight of how loved and cherished they are, and essentially do something rash they can never undo.
I've lost someone to suicide, it's utterly horrific to be left behind with such guilt and pain, the kind that'll never subside, you just get used to and learn how to go on living with it. It forces a new reality.
I was speaking many truths, from multiple life occurrences, when writing this one.
I'm so grateful you're here... I missed you and thank you for all your visits and the love you've shown and gloriously continue to
It means a lot to me, my lovely lion.
Thank you thank you.
🌹 - 💙
(◦’ ⌣ ’(’ᴗˉ✿)♡
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30th Jul 2022 11:51pm
Wow, very impressive, for it's simplicity but depth. Not every day can be a happy shiny day, and in those blue ones, emotions can truly outshine in the dark.
Amazing work.
Amazing work.
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31st Oct 2022 4:01am
What laments would come if the one we love died? You answer that question vividly and perfectly. You paint your emotions into brilliant words that fit the feelings of loss like a hand in a well-fitted glove. Truly a work of sorrowful beauty that unfolds like a dirge of rare and resplendent aesthetics.
Xo
John
Xo
John
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9th Aug 2023 4:32am
This here....
I'm so glad I backtracked through the archives
Of your Soul..
This vibe is soul satisfying
On various levels BV
You are a gem indeed
Much respect
Naaj
I'm so glad I backtracked through the archives
Of your Soul..
This vibe is soul satisfying
On various levels BV
You are a gem indeed
Much respect
Naaj
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9th Aug 2023 7:51am
Hey there, Naaj
Thanks for looking back into my DU past... and seeing a glimmer of something that you feels shines through... it means the world to me that you feel how and what I tried to convey.... - 🙏🏻
You're a gem yourself, dear soul.
Returned respect and much love...
🌹-x
Thanks for looking back into my DU past... and seeing a glimmer of something that you feels shines through... it means the world to me that you feel how and what I tried to convey.... - 🙏🏻
You're a gem yourself, dear soul.
Returned respect and much love...
🌹-x