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a kind of liberation
Compulsion guides steady hands
obeying calls
waves
commands
Oscillating between
highs and highers
smoldering flames
singe desires
Crescendo-ing
slow slow s l o w e r
the rise
shuddering edge
from precipice, cries
Captured moans
mouth infiltrating mouth
ambrosial lips teem
moisture travels south
Hands and knees
fix to the floor
turn me into
your filthy whore
Curving back
in aching sprawl
crisp loud belts
her begging squall
Sweetened honey
sinful flavour
tastebuds frenzied
madness savours
Peer in deep
gleam exquisite ravage
tempt and tear
turn willing savage
Cast off such fragile ego
surrender swift with not a care
cling at my breast, darling love
melt us in dissolving prayer
Written by
Bluevelvete
Published 20th Jun 2022
Author's Note
a little rhyming fun....
©Blu2022
©Blu2022
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Re. a kind of liberation
20th Jun 2022 12:11pm
Absolutely awesome great write, great read mega rhyme
Nod in your direction sweetie
Love and light
Ron x
Nod in your direction sweetie
Love and light
Ron x
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Re: Re. a kind of liberation
21st Jun 2022 1:09am
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Re: Re. a kind of liberation
21st Jun 2022 1:11am
Wow.
Thank you for the extremely kind words.
I'm delighted you liked what you found here.
🌹 - 💙
Thank you for the extremely kind words.
I'm delighted you liked what you found here.
🌹 - 💙
Re. a kind of liberation
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20th Jun 2022 4:09pm
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Re: Re. a kind of liberation
21st Jun 2022 1:12am
Much obliged, my friend 🙏
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. I'm thrilled you were tempted.
It's always a pleasure ✨
🌹💙
B
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. I'm thrilled you were tempted.
It's always a pleasure ✨
🌹💙
B
Re. a kind of liberation
20th Jun 2022 4:23pm
Marvelous rhymes! There is something about alternating rhymes that I can't get enough of.
That last one is an especially terrific climax!
That last one is an especially terrific climax!
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Re: Re. a kind of liberation
Hey there, MidnightSonneteer!
I am so happy you enjoyed. I value your input and feedback greatly as your own flow is such a treat to learn from!
I am continually trying to improve my rhyming skill, as I've struggled there ... So I'm all huge 😁 right now after reading your comments.
Yippee!!
Thanks so much for taking the time to share your thoughts.... it's helpful and truly meaningful to me.
-Delighted you like that end ;)
Much love and appreciation sent your way...
🌹 - 💙
B
I am so happy you enjoyed. I value your input and feedback greatly as your own flow is such a treat to learn from!
I am continually trying to improve my rhyming skill, as I've struggled there ... So I'm all huge 😁 right now after reading your comments.
Yippee!!
Thanks so much for taking the time to share your thoughts.... it's helpful and truly meaningful to me.
-Delighted you like that end ;)
Much love and appreciation sent your way...
🌹 - 💙
B
Re: Re. a kind of liberation
20th Jun 2022 5:29pm
Well of course the whole thing is the very vertex of sexiness, because the rhyme mixes with the rest of the content in a kind of literary intercourse that blends the ballads of yesteryear with a more up to date urbane sentiment that is authentically refreshing. You've really got your poetic mojo peerlessly fired up with this one!
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Re: Re. a kind of liberation
21st Jun 2022 1:18am
Omg... I love that... poetic mojo!!
I think it definitely needs to be a title to a poem!
Your wit is unparalleled!! 👍🏻
Wow!! Now, if that comment doesn't light a fire underneath my behind, then I don't know what will!!! Here's to keeping those fires burning!!
Thank you again for being the epitome of awesomely supportive.
I'm so appreciative 🙏
🌹 - 💙
I think it definitely needs to be a title to a poem!
Your wit is unparalleled!! 👍🏻
Wow!! Now, if that comment doesn't light a fire underneath my behind, then I don't know what will!!! Here's to keeping those fires burning!!
Thank you again for being the epitome of awesomely supportive.
I'm so appreciative 🙏
🌹 - 💙
Re. a kind of liberation
20th Jun 2022 4:55pm
Escape velocity....
On the edge between the event horizon and escape velocity, not escaping can be an escape. To out maneuver being captured by the gravity of the emotional certainty is a temporary defeat of the inevitable. Dodging fate.
But, to willfully enter.....is to embrace reality. To relinquish control. To give up escaping. Ironic.
On the edge between the event horizon and escape velocity, not escaping can be an escape. To out maneuver being captured by the gravity of the emotional certainty is a temporary defeat of the inevitable. Dodging fate.
But, to willfully enter.....is to embrace reality. To relinquish control. To give up escaping. Ironic.
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Re: Re. a kind of liberation
Damn, RT.
It's when reading your thoughts like these that I have this serious need/impulse to sit down with you for a cup of coffee and have a nice long chat, picking every juicy morsel out of your thoughtful and compelling brain.
You see so much.... not escaping IS an escape...
I guess it's like what you can often(sometimes?) see in (human)nature that might possibly be considered ironic as well... Where being at odds isn't necessarily a deterrent but an attraction....
For me, and I think of this often, since... it goes back to one of the first things you reminded me of, human beings are complicated and complex...
-and i suppose some are easier to explore and easier to eventually unraveling their secrets....
just my own musings...
Love where you take my thoughts, even if I missed the mark, it's still a wonderful ponder .... lol.
I appreciate the visit and all your insightfulness, thank you.
I hope you're feeling and moving better.
🌹 - 💙
B
It's when reading your thoughts like these that I have this serious need/impulse to sit down with you for a cup of coffee and have a nice long chat, picking every juicy morsel out of your thoughtful and compelling brain.
You see so much.... not escaping IS an escape...
I guess it's like what you can often(sometimes?) see in (human)nature that might possibly be considered ironic as well... Where being at odds isn't necessarily a deterrent but an attraction....
For me, and I think of this often, since... it goes back to one of the first things you reminded me of, human beings are complicated and complex...
-and i suppose some are easier to explore and easier to eventually unraveling their secrets....
just my own musings...
Love where you take my thoughts, even if I missed the mark, it's still a wonderful ponder .... lol.
I appreciate the visit and all your insightfulness, thank you.
I hope you're feeling and moving better.
🌹 - 💙
B
Re: Re. a kind of liberation
20th Jun 2022 7:12pm
Re. a kind of liberation
20th Jun 2022 7:27pm
Re: Re. a kind of liberation
20th Jun 2022 7:54pm
Awww... what a wonderful comment... thank you, dear L.
Glad you had some fun with me!
🌹 - B
Glad you had some fun with me!
🌹 - B
Re. a kind of liberation
21st Jun 2022 1:55am
You are setting me on fire. Keep on writing you strong beautiful smart sexy woman.
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Re: Re. a kind of liberation
21st Jun 2022 2:07am
Re: Re. a kind of liberation
21st Jun 2022 2:11am
Re. a kind of liberation
30th Jul 2022 9:54pm
Ms. Blue laying down the rhymes, I liked that.
Yes, it's liberating when reaching that bliss. You can say becomes one with universe right at that particular point.
Excellent work.
Yes, it's liberating when reaching that bliss. You can say becomes one with universe right at that particular point.
Excellent work.
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Re. a kind of liberation
31st Jul 2022 5:36am
This was orgasm as a consecration a sacrament of total surrender to the one you love. The metaphors you used here were right on. The sensation you embodied were incarnated into the physicality of the sacred. This is the most perfect poetization of the big O I have ever read. It is spiritual at the climactic moment when all becomes one.
Xo
John
Xo
John
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Re: Re. a kind of liberation
Dearest John,
I'm still gathering my wits about me, in finding the perfect response(s) to your generous showering of thoughtful and endearing sentiments.
My happy surprise still lingers, as I often thought of you and hoped you hadn't forgotten me. I have always kept tabs on your pieces; commenting here and there and definitely remaining smitten with your talents and seriously beautiful knack for story telling....I just needed to let that be known. - x
I adore how you get every last bit of minutiae that I hope to try and squeeze into each word and syllable. The divine spiritual sensuality that you convey and the wholly delicious way you see, feel and devour me and my soul on the page, is profoundly engaging and always.... always enchanting.
I'm so thrilled to be able to take a few moments, to see through your eyes..... as you you see me and my writing.
What an incredible gift.
Thank you.
(ㅅ´ ˘ ')♡
-Susan
I'm still gathering my wits about me, in finding the perfect response(s) to your generous showering of thoughtful and endearing sentiments.
My happy surprise still lingers, as I often thought of you and hoped you hadn't forgotten me. I have always kept tabs on your pieces; commenting here and there and definitely remaining smitten with your talents and seriously beautiful knack for story telling....I just needed to let that be known. - x
I adore how you get every last bit of minutiae that I hope to try and squeeze into each word and syllable. The divine spiritual sensuality that you convey and the wholly delicious way you see, feel and devour me and my soul on the page, is profoundly engaging and always.... always enchanting.
I'm so thrilled to be able to take a few moments, to see through your eyes..... as you you see me and my writing.
What an incredible gift.
Thank you.
(ㅅ´ ˘ ')♡
-Susan