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Seen From The Skies
Our statement stood
we couldn’t see them
in this dark night;
our evening’s serum
hindered sight
and their reflection,
brightly designed
for our protection
safety pylons
blared at us to
STOP.
In any case
we hit them hard,
our car spun forward
rubber screeching,
we start screaming,
sparks kept flying-
we closed our eyes
-before we knew it,
we went up in flame.
we couldn’t see them
in this dark night;
our evening’s serum
hindered sight
and their reflection,
brightly designed
for our protection
safety pylons
blared at us to
STOP.
In any case
we hit them hard,
our car spun forward
rubber screeching,
we start screaming,
sparks kept flying-
we closed our eyes
-before we knew it,
we went up in flame.
Published 11th Jun 2022
Author's Note
for the comp 'Orange Is the Colour'
Orange may be my favourite colour. And so I challenged myself to see it differently than I was originally inspired by: sunset, fall, etc.
So then this poem is what happened..
Orange may be my favourite colour. And so I challenged myself to see it differently than I was originally inspired by: sunset, fall, etc.
So then this poem is what happened..
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11th Jun 2022 11:42pm
I like that you went with something dark. Very cool.
Fire orange. 🔥
Good luck in comp.
Fire orange. 🔥
Good luck in comp.
12th Jun 2022 2:00am
Dear U,
Wonderful creative process and outcome. While the subject is dark it’s great story talking with concise detail and full story arch. All the best in the comp. H🌷
Wonderful creative process and outcome. While the subject is dark it’s great story talking with concise detail and full story arch. All the best in the comp. H🌷
12th Jun 2022 1:43pm
Dear H, thank you kindly, I appreciate your comment on the writing.
warmly, ursa 💜
warmly, ursa 💜
12th Jun 2022 7:00am
I felt this one... deeply.
I've personally had this experience, minus the fire...even though it still gives me the willies, it was an unique and fresh viewpoint...
Great ink, Ursa
Good luck 🤞🏻
I've personally had this experience, minus the fire...even though it still gives me the willies, it was an unique and fresh viewpoint...
Great ink, Ursa
Good luck 🤞🏻
12th Jun 2022 1:47pm
Dear B,
FIrst, I am so sorry that you've had this experience and glad you are okay?!
So very scary; this, in varying degrees is just too common, and too often with irreversible outcome.
I appreciate you stopping by, thank you.
warmly,
ursa 💜
FIrst, I am so sorry that you've had this experience and glad you are okay?!
So very scary; this, in varying degrees is just too common, and too often with irreversible outcome.
I appreciate you stopping by, thank you.
warmly,
ursa 💜
25th Jul 2022 8:07pm
I find it a joy to come across an unknown poet whose work makes everything come to a screeching halt. Whoa. And to think there are so many more!
28th Jul 2022 1:54pm
