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Who Cares Dinah?
someone in the kitchen
is cryin'
someone in the kitchen
breakin' bowls
someone in the kitchen
is cryin'
but i just want to go home
someone in the parlor
is readin'
someone in the parlor
rippin' pages outta books
someone in the parlor
is readin'
but i just want to go home
someone in the den
stokin' fire
someone in the den
tryin' burn down the house
someone in the den
stokin' fire
but i just want to go home
someone in the bed
is dyin'
someone in the bed
tryin' drown in the sheets
someone in the bed
is dyin'
but i just want to go to sleep
is cryin'
someone in the kitchen
breakin' bowls
someone in the kitchen
is cryin'
but i just want to go home
someone in the parlor
is readin'
someone in the parlor
rippin' pages outta books
someone in the parlor
is readin'
but i just want to go home
someone in the den
stokin' fire
someone in the den
tryin' burn down the house
someone in the den
stokin' fire
but i just want to go home
someone in the bed
is dyin'
someone in the bed
tryin' drown in the sheets
someone in the bed
is dyin'
but i just want to go to sleep
Published 17th Mar 2012
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17th Mar 2012 4:39pm
17th Mar 2012 4:42pm
17th Mar 2012 6:19pm
"But I just want to go home" is my favorite line, the way it is repeated makes it so much more dramatic and yearning.
17th Mar 2012 7:01pm
17th Mar 2012 6:55pm
I thought this was lovely, especially how you mixed it up with the last line. It made me smile.
17th Mar 2012 7:03pm
not really meant to make you smile, but I am glad you liked it. thanks for reading and commenting
19th Mar 2012 00:52am
this poem evokes the feeling a lot of people have of being trapped in a hostile environment and not wanting to be there. enjoyed reading it :)
