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Tumbleweed
The care and attention
you paid to artistry,
decorating, home comforts;
the strength and energy spent
attempting to counter-balance
count for nothing
when the house you built
on uneven foundations
comes tumbling
d
o
w
n
you paid to artistry,
decorating, home comforts;
the strength and energy spent
attempting to counter-balance
count for nothing
when the house you built
on uneven foundations
comes tumbling
d
o
w
n
Published 16th May 2022
| Edited 19th May 2022
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17th May 2022 7:54am
Another write that brings forth lyrics from a song! Yes those "castles made of sand fall into the sea eventually".
19th May 2022 7:48pm
This is so clever. I was surprised 😮 when I got here the second time round not to see more comments.
Lets just applaud how the final word so artisticly ties into the title. That's bloody brilliant.
The metaphor of the home as a relationship is also masterful (I'm a sucker for a good metaphor.)
Thing with these stripped poems in freeform ( the Spanish poets coined the phrase "naked poetry" in the 1800's) any possible word or punctuation that you can do with out actually ads to the poem. I know it's crazy weird.
Thanks for sharing this. The relationship topic is often hard to write in it's raw / real blood on the page.
Blue Skies at you
Al
Lets just applaud how the final word so artisticly ties into the title. That's bloody brilliant.
The metaphor of the home as a relationship is also masterful (I'm a sucker for a good metaphor.)
Thing with these stripped poems in freeform ( the Spanish poets coined the phrase "naked poetry" in the 1800's) any possible word or punctuation that you can do with out actually ads to the poem. I know it's crazy weird.
Thanks for sharing this. The relationship topic is often hard to write in it's raw / real blood on the page.
Blue Skies at you
Al
19th May 2022 7:50pm
Thank youuuu! It's always gratifying when someone gets it, appreciates the links and maybe even sees something new. I'm not remotely bothered how many people read or comment, but I do appreciate every single one. Now I'm rested from NaPo, I'm having fun doing something different.
