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Tides
It would we wiser
To search for mermaids in the sea,
Than to find any memories you may have had of me.
Born, still the Family Album is a photograph
Of six apples in a chipped bowl.
Smoke from the fire of little clothes
Stirred as an old man walking wounded through woods.
To search for mermaids in the sea,
Than to find any memories you may have had of me.
Born, still the Family Album is a photograph
Of six apples in a chipped bowl.
Smoke from the fire of little clothes
Stirred as an old man walking wounded through woods.
Published 30th Mar 2022
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ERULGCT 135 Uma xx
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Anonymous
31st Mar 2022 00:00am
I must have come back to this two or three times. I guess I just wanted to see how it effected the perspective.
The opening is strong — to compare our lives to myth and legend shows the variations of how people view us in life. It got me thinking about how much of our closest don’t even know us. Especially family. They are meant to be the ones who we are bonded and many know hardly anything about who we really are.
The second half feels a lot more melancholic than the first. Like a distant memory coming back around to haunt us.
There’s an overall bleakness that runs through this piece, but not in an awful way. It just feels so heavy of the sadness that it is tagged with.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
The opening is strong — to compare our lives to myth and legend shows the variations of how people view us in life. It got me thinking about how much of our closest don’t even know us. Especially family. They are meant to be the ones who we are bonded and many know hardly anything about who we really are.
The second half feels a lot more melancholic than the first. Like a distant memory coming back around to haunt us.
There’s an overall bleakness that runs through this piece, but not in an awful way. It just feels so heavy of the sadness that it is tagged with.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
31st Mar 2022 2:47pm
Ta. Appreciated. "Born, still.." is the fulcrum of this scribble. Bleakness is me. Lol. I always liked those words of Marc Almond: "If you're going to wallow, then wallow deep."
