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Rewarded More?
Atheists always preach about
how it should be about good works,
but I disagree-
the good folks have it easier than the mean;
they ain't tormented every damn day
to the point where they feel they have nothing to offer or say.
I'm not even on a Christian mission,
just trying to say something different.
I don't please the freaks,
just the ones who still have some humanity left,
something I've kept for long enough.
So, why they should be rewarded more?
The ones who weren't taught to be mean?
The one who don't go crazy every night
trying to figure out their life?
Why they should be rewarded more?
how it should be about good works,
but I disagree-
the good folks have it easier than the mean;
they ain't tormented every damn day
to the point where they feel they have nothing to offer or say.
I'm not even on a Christian mission,
just trying to say something different.
I don't please the freaks,
just the ones who still have some humanity left,
something I've kept for long enough.
So, why they should be rewarded more?
The ones who weren't taught to be mean?
The one who don't go crazy every night
trying to figure out their life?
Why they should be rewarded more?
Published 10th Jan 2022
Author's Note
This is just part of an idea for a song that I'd love to do one day. It's about the atheistic idea that an afterlife reward (especially in Christianity) should fully be about good works, but honestly, I call bs on that because we all have different struggles which influence our decisions. Comparing someone's journey to someone else's is like comparing oranges to apples honestly.
I'd love to hear what you think!
I'd love to hear what you think!
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4th Jun 2022 9:41pm
I sometimes call myself atheistic, but I think my atheism involves not believing in "scripture" -- in the prophesies and fantastic promises of various religious scripture. I don't think anybody past or present can say what lies beyond the grave. i don't believe in particular gods or in the words of prophets. The idea, though, is that we can do good anyway -- that we can do good "without god." Who knows what happens after that? Maybe nothing.
Regardless, I enjoyed your poem. It had me thinking.
Well written.
Thanks.
J
Regardless, I enjoyed your poem. It had me thinking.
Well written.
Thanks.
J
9th Jul 2023 1:04am
You’re very courageous with your pen. I’ve been reading your poems and I feel like I’ve stumbled onto something(meaning someone) with a great amount of potential.
Believe in yourself, dear poet and all comparisons will eventually fall away
Believe in yourself, dear poet and all comparisons will eventually fall away
22nd Sep 2023 2:15pm
I'm glad someone believes :)
Want to be a music artist singing this stuff all day...one day
Want to be a music artist singing this stuff all day...one day
