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Who Made Me
When I was a kid, maybe
Eight years old or so
My hair was so long back then
It was always a mess,
So frizzy and tangled
I felt as if
My thoughts got lost in it
Mum tried all the remedies
From detangle sprays to special brushes
And found the solution with siccors
I remember so clearly, looking
At the cut off locks on the floor
To the unrecognisable reflection in the mirror
You stripped me of more than hair back then
Since then, I've thought only in practicalities
No desire or want, but simply what's easy
Since then, I've been someone else
Someone who doesn't need you
To hold my hair when I throw up
Eight years old or so
My hair was so long back then
It was always a mess,
So frizzy and tangled
I felt as if
My thoughts got lost in it
Mum tried all the remedies
From detangle sprays to special brushes
And found the solution with siccors
I remember so clearly, looking
At the cut off locks on the floor
To the unrecognisable reflection in the mirror
You stripped me of more than hair back then
Since then, I've thought only in practicalities
No desire or want, but simply what's easy
Since then, I've been someone else
Someone who doesn't need you
To hold my hair when I throw up
Published 28th Dec 2021
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28th Dec 2021 10:47pm
13th Jan 2022 2:57pm
Thank you for your comment!
Perhaps it's more the things that the haircut represented that was traumatic - being stripped of your own choices and living life according to someone else's decisions.
Perhaps it's more the things that the haircut represented that was traumatic - being stripped of your own choices and living life according to someone else's decisions.
29th Dec 2021 00:34am
I feel this deeply. The correlation made between the haircut and your outlook--a lack of passion or feeling--is brilliant. Great metaphor and imagery and the perfect example of drawing out such a deep, magical tale from a utilitarian, everyday occurence. An instance of the depth that can come from simplicity in the best instances of poetry.
13th Jan 2022 2:58pm
29th Dec 2021 3:33pm
This is strangely moving in its own unique way. That correlation between strength and your hair is reminiscent of Samson in biblical stories. What comes out from that is this really on point narrative about the relationship between the two.
It’s interesting and held my attention. Thank you for sharing.
-M
It’s interesting and held my attention. Thank you for sharing.
-M
