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The Space Of Her
There is an abyss of broken
stars within those angel eyes,
galaxies of scars and pain
that shimmer when she cries.
Oh to be an astronaut and drift
among those stars, floating
through the space of her
kissing every scar.
stars within those angel eyes,
galaxies of scars and pain
that shimmer when she cries.
Oh to be an astronaut and drift
among those stars, floating
through the space of her
kissing every scar.
Published 1st Dec 2021
Author's Note
It’s about loving someone who is broken
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1st Dec 2021 2:56pm
Very emotive.... crisp distinct lines.... terrific title.... the brevity of emotional impact is felt...
Really successful write.
Thanks for sharing with us and welcome to DUP.
🌹 - B
Really successful write.
Thanks for sharing with us and welcome to DUP.
🌹 - B
1st Dec 2021 3:58pm
6th Dec 2021 4:42pm
That abyss of broken stars line is really rather lovely. I’d possibly think about eliminating the first use of the word scar so that it isn’t repeated towards the end.
Nevertheless a very atmospheric read. Thank you for sharing and welcome to DU.
-M
Nevertheless a very atmospheric read. Thank you for sharing and welcome to DU.
-M
