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I hurt myself today, to see if I could change
I get a chill
from quite a fishy smell,
so sure I'll be betrayed,
so sure of your loveless gaze.
If I speak my thoughts, I
will be berated by you,
faster than I could utter an
intelligible response. You
render me speechless, I
can never get a word in;
the hedges are overgrown,
and I, in my nightgown,
everlasting.
from quite a fishy smell,
so sure I'll be betrayed,
so sure of your loveless gaze.
If I speak my thoughts, I
will be berated by you,
faster than I could utter an
intelligible response. You
render me speechless, I
can never get a word in;
the hedges are overgrown,
and I, in my nightgown,
everlasting.
Published 20th Nov 2021
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I feel like hugs are in oder....
(uber hugs)...
btw, I totally love seeing your pen at work!
🌹 - 💙
B
(uber hugs)...
btw, I totally love seeing your pen at work!
🌹 - 💙
B
20th Nov 2021 7:31pm
My pen is tipped with a white flag, not only for peace to myself, but also so I have an excuse to sing the Dido song. 😉💜
Thanks Blue!
Thanks Blue!
22nd Nov 2021 3:17pm
I really like the last two lines. They make the poem, creating a surprisingly insightful and painful image, to symbolise domestic abuse and how it renders the victim perpetually a shadowy figure. Always in her nightgown.
26th Nov 2021 9:02am
I like this a lot, it almost replicates that haphazard stream-of-consciousness way our thoughts besiege us. :)
