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dead
Dead
Is how I feel
Dead
Is how it ended
Dead
Is when you left me
Dead
Is all the passion
Dead
Is all the beauty
Dead
Is all the fight
Dead
Is the lonley
Dead
Is the truth
Dead
Is the journey
Dead
Is my heart
Dead
Is your name
Dead
Is the begining
Is how I feel
Dead
Is how it ended
Dead
Is when you left me
Dead
Is all the passion
Dead
Is all the beauty
Dead
Is all the fight
Dead
Is the lonley
Dead
Is the truth
Dead
Is the journey
Dead
Is my heart
Dead
Is your name
Dead
Is the begining
Published 4th Mar 2012
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4th Mar 2012 10:59am
I like it but I think as more of a hook you should use "Death" instead of "Dead". It just sounds better.
Like:
Death, is what feel.
Death, is how it ended.
Death, is when you left me... etc.
Like:
Death, is what feel.
Death, is how it ended.
Death, is when you left me... etc.
4th Mar 2012 9:09pm
28th Mar 2012 9:17pm
Idk dead sounds better, its gives it more power...death natrully flows, but I feel like saying dead gives it a point.
Great poem :)
Great poem :)
28th Mar 2012 9:46pm
