it's the captive heart that runs free

The powerful sense of connection and love is beautifully and heartbreakingly written here, bk.... You convey ache in a way that's truly poetic.... I am so lucky to read.... xo


I can only hope to try and learn that ability, to write gorgeous heartbreak, like a true master... You're poetry is there, in spades, in my opinion.

Awesome ink
🌹 - 💙
xo
B

My dearest Blue. Thank you is not enough.
I am so unworthy of your praise.



biggest hugs/luv's.
buddhakitty
(still wish we could have that tea party )

This is powerful ❤

Thank you, Loveberry. Very much appreciated.



hugs,
buddhakitty.

Powerful.

Thank you, Cipher.



hugs,
buddhakitty

Dear BK,

Profoundly touching in a way that transcends words. Really lovely.
H🌷

Thank you, Honoria.



hugs,
buddhakitty.

"When the shadows call all my dreams home"  -Great line, love it.

I mean no offense, but how about putting the word "war" at the end of the line above it, because "War And Peace" is a very famous novel and I myself read it as just that title and not what you intended.
Let the "And peace" begin that next line, to break up that miscommunication.  

I like your style of simplicity, of saying a lot without frills.  It works well.

Thank you, Styxian. I took you suggestion and it works well for me. Very much appreciated. Good catch.
Also, much appreciated that you enjoyed the overall tone of the piece.

hugs,
buddhakitty.

Whew!  You didn't take offense to my suggestion!  LOL.  (I always feel worried that some writers will be too sensitive, whereas I only and always mean well).
I reread your poem, and it does make a better flow and I'm glad to help out.
I always need another set of eyes when I share something of my own, because that's how we learn, from other's insight as well as our own.
I have an older friend who has been my mentor (and I, hers) of sorts for two decades. We've never met. Strictly online as lovers of writing.  She's definitely made me a better writer, and even a more mature person with dealing with others.  
That's what good people do.  

My thing is that I write stream of consciousness. I really don't give a great deal of thought to what comes out...it just comes out. For me intent is more important than form and I may have not used the best form to get there, so suggestions are always welcomed even if I don't always use them. Plus it's foolish to get upset over someone trying to do you a solid by making a reasonable suggestion. Never really understood the reason behind that...lol.

big hugs,
buddhakitty.

BK, you delivered some many powerful lines through this piece here.
Amazing work.

Many thanks, wally.


hugs,
buddhakitty.