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Spiders
Clans of
venomous spiders
nurtured her
from conception
Their black spiny
spindle of legs
wove her skin
of immortal silk
decades ago
Spinnerets
sparkle like
poisonous ornaments
from the wall of
nightshade that
blooms in
her bedroom
Innocence embodied
in a toxic
withered frame
Lean in a
smidge closer
Her web of
white gold
sparkles like
sugared crystals
You know
She needs one
reason to sting
The lingering
scent of red
in her web
brings comfort
and the familiarity
of intoxication
She'll gyrate
you into an
intricate basket
in the form
of a human casket
Using you for nourishment
For survival
Like all the rest
Cannibalistic
by nature
She will eat you alive
You want her to
venomous spiders
nurtured her
from conception
Their black spiny
spindle of legs
wove her skin
of immortal silk
decades ago
Spinnerets
sparkle like
poisonous ornaments
from the wall of
nightshade that
blooms in
her bedroom
Innocence embodied
in a toxic
withered frame
Lean in a
smidge closer
Her web of
white gold
sparkles like
sugared crystals
You know
She needs one
reason to sting
The lingering
scent of red
in her web
brings comfort
and the familiarity
of intoxication
She'll gyrate
you into an
intricate basket
in the form
of a human casket
Using you for nourishment
For survival
Like all the rest
Cannibalistic
by nature
She will eat you alive
You want her to
Author's Note
I love the fact that spiders spin intricate webs. To be able to weave
something intricate from themselves. It reminds me of writing.
You start with nothing and end up with a masterpiece hoping to mesmerize someone.
something intricate from themselves. It reminds me of writing.
You start with nothing and end up with a masterpiece hoping to mesmerize someone.
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Re. Spiders
Anonymous
15th Sep 2021 1:41am
A lot of very enjoyable rhythms here.
Like this run of syllables--
Spinnerets
sparkle like
poisonous ornaments
from the wall of
nightshade that
blooms in
her bedroom
Spiders are fascinating. I remember when I learned that some spiders are called "orb weavers"--when I look at their webs, they looked like regular webs. Confused, I read and learned that the helical spiral of the conventional spider web is considered an orb or "sphere," but seen from "above," the eccentric spiral supposed to represent the widening circumference...
Enjoyed!
Like this run of syllables--
Spinnerets
sparkle like
poisonous ornaments
from the wall of
nightshade that
blooms in
her bedroom
Spiders are fascinating. I remember when I learned that some spiders are called "orb weavers"--when I look at their webs, they looked like regular webs. Confused, I read and learned that the helical spiral of the conventional spider web is considered an orb or "sphere," but seen from "above," the eccentric spiral supposed to represent the widening circumference...
Enjoyed!
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Re: Re. Spiders
15th Sep 2021 1:44am
Thanks Mark!
I struggled with this one. I worked on it for days!!
Still need some work though.
Might add to it later. I need to step back and let it simmer
for a bit.
I struggled with this one. I worked on it for days!!
Still need some work though.
Might add to it later. I need to step back and let it simmer
for a bit.
Re. Spiders
15th Sep 2021 1:53am
Re: Re. Spiders
15th Sep 2021 1:56am
Thank you.
I might add the word mesmerized and terrified a bit later.
This one gave ma a headache. LOL
Thanks again
I might add the word mesmerized and terrified a bit later.
This one gave ma a headache. LOL
Thanks again
Re: Re. Spiders
15th Sep 2021 1:58am
You're welcome. Yes, it was very creative and enjoyable to read. A special kind of dark. As for your edits, no true masterpiece is ever complete - or so they say ;)
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Re. Spiders
15th Sep 2021 2:09am
You've got some poets I know keeping an eye one you to so they must see the same thing. As you learn and develop, you are gonna be a stand out!
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Re: Re. Spiders
15th Sep 2021 2:15am
Thank you!! Glad you enjoyed it. Wanted to try something different from the other stuff I have on here.
Thanks again!!
Thanks again!!
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15th Sep 2021 2:26am
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15th Sep 2021 6:15pm
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Re: Re. Spiders
15th Sep 2021 1:38pm
Thank you so much. Like I was stating in some earlier comments. I struggled with this one. All I heard were whispers of crickets.
Nada. LOL Finally I starting filtering words in but, phew, it was a chore.
Thanks again.
Nada. LOL Finally I starting filtering words in but, phew, it was a chore.
Thanks again.
Re. Spiders
15th Sep 2021 3:56am
Dear A,
Okay, cards on the table- I hate bugs. But! You’ve written some fabulous images here.
“ Her web of
white gold
sparkles like
sugared crystals” diamonds and gold! A girls best friends. 😃
“ She needs one
reason to sting” and some days I don’t even need one reason, I’ll just sting. 😉
“ She'll gyrate
you into an
intricate basket
in the form
of a human casket” that’s just great writing. 😊
Your use of rhyming and it’s meter worked so well throughout and I really liked the metaphors of the spider to human behaviors.
Well done. H🌷
Okay, cards on the table- I hate bugs. But! You’ve written some fabulous images here.
“ Her web of
white gold
sparkles like
sugared crystals” diamonds and gold! A girls best friends. 😃
“ She needs one
reason to sting” and some days I don’t even need one reason, I’ll just sting. 😉
“ She'll gyrate
you into an
intricate basket
in the form
of a human casket” that’s just great writing. 😊
Your use of rhyming and it’s meter worked so well throughout and I really liked the metaphors of the spider to human behaviors.
Well done. H🌷
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Re: Re. Spiders
15th Sep 2021 1:44pm
Girl, I hate those little bastards too. LOL
Thank you so much for all of your comments.
I like to use the what if factor and put myself in the driver seat.
It helps a lot with metaphors.
Thank you so much for your fabulous snaps amiga!!
Thank you so much for all of your comments.
I like to use the what if factor and put myself in the driver seat.
It helps a lot with metaphors.
Thank you so much for your fabulous snaps amiga!!
Re. Spiders
16th Sep 2021 2:08pm
Good sustained flow with this ... pulled me ... carried me along ... nice write ...
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Re: Re. Spiders
16th Sep 2021 2:20pm
Thank you so much for taking a look. You post so many fabulous poems. I'm so happy you took the time to read mine.
This one was not easy. Trying to keep someone interested past the first paragraph is the struggle. I try to imagine okay, now what, why should they keep reading. Glad this one is over. LOL
Thanks again LilD
This one was not easy. Trying to keep someone interested past the first paragraph is the struggle. I try to imagine okay, now what, why should they keep reading. Glad this one is over. LOL
Thanks again LilD
Re. Spiders
20th Sep 2021 7:39pm
What an amazingly unique web of words you weave, Adelphina. Your style is definitely something beautiful! There is so much I like about this that it's difficult for a comment to do it justice. :) I love how you captured so much about deception and lies using the spider analogy. 'sparkle like poisonous ornaments from the wall of nightshade that blooms in her bedroom.' and 'She'll gyrate you into an intricate basket in the form of a human casket Using you for nourishment' are some of my favorite lines. And that ending, Love it! 'She will eat you alive You want her to'. Just wow. :)
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Re: Re. Spiders
20th Sep 2021 11:42pm
Thank you soooo much. Sometimes I post things in a rush. I'm trying to do better and let things simmer for a bit. Really think about what I want to say and convey it a my own sense of style. Kinda like our wardrobes and shoes!! LOL Still trying to find my voice.
Thank you so much for all your snaps!!
Thank you so much for all your snaps!!
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Re: Re. Spiders
14th Oct 2021 11:30pm
Thank you so much!!!
I am truly touched by this comment.
To read this post after a long day at work just made me
feel great and smile. I might print this out and put on my fridge
next time I am having a bad day.
Again thanks again for your encouraging words:)
I am truly touched by this comment.
To read this post after a long day at work just made me
feel great and smile. I might print this out and put on my fridge
next time I am having a bad day.
Again thanks again for your encouraging words:)
Anonymous
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14th Oct 2021 11:40pm
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17th Oct 2021 00:29am