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Soft
The waves crashing against my ankles
My dreams haunted by your betrayal
The dark purples below my green eyes
You always remind me of how soft
My skin is
Against yours
Did hers feel the same?
My dreams haunted by your betrayal
The dark purples below my green eyes
You always remind me of how soft
My skin is
Against yours
Did hers feel the same?
Published 7th Sep 2021
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7th Sep 2021 8:05am
Dear A,
The soft and colorful adjectives you’ve written are in sharp contrast to the subject of this poem. Your closing line is a plot twist that leaves your reader stunned and saddened by the betrayal. I’m terribly sorry for the pain a situation like this causes. The writing is hauntingly beautiful.
H🌷
The soft and colorful adjectives you’ve written are in sharp contrast to the subject of this poem. Your closing line is a plot twist that leaves your reader stunned and saddened by the betrayal. I’m terribly sorry for the pain a situation like this causes. The writing is hauntingly beautiful.
H🌷
7th Sep 2021 11:22am
The powerhouse of that last line has it's echo reverberating to my very core.... You have captured such enormous emotions here that can't really be quantified by my comments—
Only to say, I hear you...
Sending out hopeful and healing thoughts...
✨ 💫 ✨
🌹 - B
Only to say, I hear you...
Sending out hopeful and healing thoughts...
✨ 💫 ✨
🌹 - B
