heartache

For you,
I pray that the next sun rise
evaporates ur confusion
and brings light to ur eyes
for you I wish for the best of times
and that u get ur piece of mind

Thank you so much.. I appreciate your honest words.

Hey i'm leaving u feedback like u asked. I dig the meaning and i feel your emotions. I think u could take insomnia as a metaphor & run w/ it in this poem. Something like comparing the depth of the agony of depression to the exhaustion of not being able to sleep, idk something like that. U also have some grammatical errors & not all ur words choices are very strong. U don't have to write anything that makes me look for a dictionary. But challenge urself and the reader to think about what u r saying. The use of creative words can make us look deeper into meaning or see a topic from a different perspective. Sry that was long, hope it was helpful.

Its going to be helpful. Coz i'm new to writing poems. And as long as u critize it am gonna learn and work on my writing. Thanks for your contribution