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The Itsy Bitsy Spider
The Itsy Bitsy spider
crawled out from his depression.
Down came the government
who took away all his possesions.
Then out came the health issues
that dried up all the hope.
And the Itsy Bitsy spider
died at the end of a rope.
(thanks eamon, even though you said its not needed, you still helped and that deserves credit.)
crawled out from his depression.
Down came the government
who took away all his possesions.
Then out came the health issues
that dried up all the hope.
And the Itsy Bitsy spider
died at the end of a rope.
(thanks eamon, even though you said its not needed, you still helped and that deserves credit.)
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ommited suicide in his apartment.
25th Feb 2012 2:56am
funny, also rings true of today's society at least those that are feeling the pinch.
kinda wanted a nice rhyme at the end, but the one you have fits.
as short as this is, it has a lot to say.
good stuff.
kinda wanted a nice rhyme at the end, but the one you have fits.
as short as this is, it has a lot to say.
good stuff.
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25th Feb 2012 3:09pm
thanks, i was debating about saying "crawled back to his depression", but what wouldl you suggest?
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18th Mar 2012 4:55pm
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18th Mar 2012 5:25pm
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19th Mar 2012 00:19am
DUDE!!!!
3rd Mar 2012 7:47pm
this is EPIC!! XD nice job capturing the government as assholes.. cuz they are..
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11th Mar 2012 4:08pm
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11th Mar 2012 5:57pm
Agreed, they're allowed to go into your bank accounts! Leave you with nothing! No one should have that right, I don't care what you do in life, you shouldn't be able to destroy someone like that!
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11th Mar 2012 10:11pm
Its not fair. they have too much power. they can take everything you own and ruin your life.
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11th Mar 2012 10:21pm
Beyond that, they NEVER get in trouble because they can pay people off. Rarely do you see someone working in or close to the government get in trouble
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11th Mar 2012 10:31pm
Exactly! And if they do get caught, they just "publicaly apologize" and that makes it all better. its like that with famous athletes too. corupt
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11th Mar 2012 10:38pm
If the president raped a 12 year old in an alley he wouldn't go to jail. She could get gonorrhea and die and he wouldn't even get sued!
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12th Mar 2012 10:36pm
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12th Mar 2012 10:36pm
Waaaay down here I am,
18th Mar 2012 5:12pm
Well, I'm waaay down here at the bottom of the list of your positive comments list, saying that it was pretty much as wonderful for me as it was for all the other supporters you've got.
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re: Waaaay down here I am,
19th Mar 2012 00:18am
lol, its the same three people, but thank you for likeing it. Yeah, i like to talk so i always respond back to peoples comments, and when they respond back, it looks longer than it is. BUT anyway, thanks for the comment, you know i appriciate it :)