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Explaining to a leaf.... [freeverse]
~ loneliness ~
Winds stalk me,
leaves tremble at my approach …
they are frightened
of the cold that follows.
In hushed, rustling whispers,
as I pass, they ask,
“Why is it you are not afraid?”
Un-answering, my feet march on,
trodding on their fallen brethren,
lovers, sisters, and friends ...
why bother with answers.
Would they understand?
How do you explain to a shivering leaf
that the cold can’t be as bad
as waking up tomorrow,
finding it’s become
as lonely today as every day
is going to be,
what it’s like
finding the same empty bed,
with the same lone hair
stretched out across your pillow;
a single-stranded ghost,
the constant reminder
that all too often,
hearts,
like seasons …
share a kinship of change?
Winds stalk me,
leaves tremble at my approach …
they are frightened
of the cold that follows.
In hushed, rustling whispers,
as I pass, they ask,
“Why is it you are not afraid?”
Un-answering, my feet march on,
trodding on their fallen brethren,
lovers, sisters, and friends ...
why bother with answers.
Would they understand?
How do you explain to a shivering leaf
that the cold can’t be as bad
as waking up tomorrow,
finding it’s become
as lonely today as every day
is going to be,
what it’s like
finding the same empty bed,
with the same lone hair
stretched out across your pillow;
a single-stranded ghost,
the constant reminder
that all too often,
hearts,
like seasons …
share a kinship of change?
Author's Note
When seeking solace, one never knows whom or what they may share their loneliness with.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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- Edited 25th Aug 2021 10:45pm
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Re: Re. Explaining to a leaf....
4th Jun 2021 2:18pm
Thank you, MPD,
I'm so pleased you selected one of my humble pieces to read and comment on and praise.
I so very much appreciate your encouraging words! ⁓ Richard 🍃
I'm so pleased you selected one of my humble pieces to read and comment on and praise.
I so very much appreciate your encouraging words! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Oct 2022 6:45pm
3rd Jun 2021 7:56pm
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Re: Re. Explaining to a leaf....
4th Jun 2021 2:30pm
Ah, Tim, my very fine friend 🍷
How insightful your words speak of my truest intend when scribing this rather unusual conspiring of Nature's and emotion's whims.
There is a special metaphorical bent of whimsy to this one used to emphasize and exaggerate the feelings and imagery from a heart's loss.
There was one reviewer who told me I was cheating to do so, but they admitted to jealousy … LOL!
Bless you with a basketful of thanks for your always meaningful take and praise on my simple poetry! ⁓ Richard 🍃
How insightful your words speak of my truest intend when scribing this rather unusual conspiring of Nature's and emotion's whims.
There is a special metaphorical bent of whimsy to this one used to emphasize and exaggerate the feelings and imagery from a heart's loss.
There was one reviewer who told me I was cheating to do so, but they admitted to jealousy … LOL!
Bless you with a basketful of thanks for your always meaningful take and praise on my simple poetry! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Re. Explaining to a leaf....
3rd Jun 2021 9:43pm
Your words permeate deep starting with the feel of wind stalking.. how apropos! Your creative use of descriptive metaphors seal in that succinctness of despair and aloneness... how it felt like a gut punch, each question you asked... To me that's how great poetry should affect you.... and damn, you really, did, Richard.
Outstanding ink and really spot on picture choice. I was utterly transfixed
🌹-💙
B
Outstanding ink and really spot on picture choice. I was utterly transfixed
🌹-💙
B
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Re: Re. Explaining to a leaf....
Goodness gracious, Sue 🍂
Every once in a great while a reviewer will happen along who knows how and possesses the rare, skillful charm to make a bard feel grateful for his humble efforts to write for, in hopes of, pleasing his readers … someone special, just like You.
As the master poetess you truly are, to share your effulgent description in the way(s) this piece effects and touches you match perfectly with my intended desire … then, that you have that open, honest, and forthright quality to praise my efforts uninhibitedly sweeps me up and over the moon.
Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Lady-Poet, for your lovely, lasting touches! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Every once in a great while a reviewer will happen along who knows how and possesses the rare, skillful charm to make a bard feel grateful for his humble efforts to write for, in hopes of, pleasing his readers … someone special, just like You.
As the master poetess you truly are, to share your effulgent description in the way(s) this piece effects and touches you match perfectly with my intended desire … then, that you have that open, honest, and forthright quality to praise my efforts uninhibitedly sweeps me up and over the moon.
Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Lady-Poet, for your lovely, lasting touches! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Re. Explaining to a leaf....
5th Jun 2021 3:35pm
Re: Re. Explaining to a leaf....
5th Jun 2021 4:17pm
Thoughtfully and kindly put, Dear Poet 😌
True, too (sadly so), what you say about life's reality.
Thank you ever-so gratefully for selecting this humble poem.
A basketful of blessings for your day, Oral ⁓ Richard 🍃
True, too (sadly so), what you say about life's reality.
Thank you ever-so gratefully for selecting this humble poem.
A basketful of blessings for your day, Oral ⁓ Richard 🍃
Re: Re. Explaining to a leaf....
5th Jun 2021 4:29pm
Richard, you are so talented and gracious. Look forward to more great poetry from your creativity. Hugs and peace, oral
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Re: Re. Explaining to a leaf....
5th Jun 2021 4:46pm
Oral,
With such a review as yours, I'm sure to post more often.
Thank you for your kindness and inspiration … it's exactly what I need. : )
And, talk about talented, I just read and reviewed your topnotch "ODE TO THE COY LOVER" … ohhh-BOY, I loved it!
Big HUG! ⁓ RJ
With such a review as yours, I'm sure to post more often.
Thank you for your kindness and inspiration … it's exactly what I need. : )
And, talk about talented, I just read and reviewed your topnotch "ODE TO THE COY LOVER" … ohhh-BOY, I loved it!
Big HUG! ⁓ RJ
Re: Re. Explaining to a leaf....
5th Jun 2021 4:50pm
Big hug accepted and graciously returned. Yes, coy lovers need to dare come forth; just imagine what the world of passion would be like. Hugs and peace, oral
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Re: Re. Explaining to a leaf....
5th Jun 2021 7:33pm
Re. Explaining to a leaf.... [freeverse]
13th Jun 2021 3:34pm
Re: Re. Explaining to a leaf.... [freeverse]
18th Jul 2021 8:50pm
Ah, so, Marks ⛩ 啊,原来如此!
Thank you for your read and gracious compliment! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Thank you for your read and gracious compliment! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Re: Re. Explaining to a leaf.... [freeverse]
18th Jul 2021 11:53pm
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- Edited 19th Jul 2023 3:46am
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Re. Explaining to a leaf.... [freeverse]
28th Sep 2021 6:01pm
Wow Richard, your metaphoric poetry is incredible in powerfully delivering your message. The imagery is palpable. You have brilliantly captured the despair of loneliness. You can feel the depression and anxiety, even apathy. Picture choice is an amazing compliment to the writing. Love this!
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Kristina Dear 🎶
You are far more than a beautiful face; you've the heart, mind, and soul of a lover of life and the power flowing out from masterful poetry … a masterful poetess in your own right.
The kind of uniquely splendid woman a man can appreciate, respect, and love,
Thank you ever-so warmly for blessing me with your effervescent presence.
Hugs! ⁓ Richard🖌
You are far more than a beautiful face; you've the heart, mind, and soul of a lover of life and the power flowing out from masterful poetry … a masterful poetess in your own right.
The kind of uniquely splendid woman a man can appreciate, respect, and love,
Thank you ever-so warmly for blessing me with your effervescent presence.
Hugs! ⁓ Richard🖌