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the stars, our home
Secluded, small, serene
We laughed and danced on creaky boards
Before
stirrings of ill health crept, we prayed
between Christmas and June.
She left; we, left
alone.
the stars, our home
Secluded, small, serene
We laughed and danced on creaky boards
Before
stirrings of ill health crept, we prayed
between Christmas and June.
She left; we, left
alone.
Published 6th May 2021
Author's Note
this is for the competition 42 syllables; Butterfly Cinquain.
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6th May 2021 3:45pm
"We laughed and danced on creaky boards" ... pure poetic gold ... nicely poeted ... great visual ... smooth flow ... resonate write ...
6th May 2021 6:39pm
@LilDragonFly thank you. 💜 first butterfly cinquain for me. what a lovely form. thank you for reading and your kind words. I appreciate you. warmly, ursa
6th May 2021 4:36pm
Dear U,
There was an entire life time lived between your poignant lines. I thought this lovely poem extremely touching and I wish you the best in the comp. H🌷
There was an entire life time lived between your poignant lines. I thought this lovely poem extremely touching and I wish you the best in the comp. H🌷
6th May 2021 6:40pm
@Honoria, thank you for reading and for your kind comment. It was what I had wanted to put into the form.. a lifetime. You words made me smile. I appreciate you. warmly, ursa
6th May 2021 9:50pm
6th May 2021 10:45pm
8th May 2021 11:40am
Very moving. A reminder not to take things for granted... for one day 'ill health will creep in'.
8th May 2021 7:57pm
