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Half-Spent Wishes
Dandelion in the spring,
half your wishes spent;
carried off on tattered wing,
astride hope’s last lament
purchased wind that wanting bought,
secured upon dead air;
were they wasted without thought,
dispensed without a care?
was each plucked with great concern,
did you and Love conspire?
placed in hands that upwards yearn,
where action meets desire?
gently to the earth I blow,
down where all the wishes go
half your wishes spent;
carried off on tattered wing,
astride hope’s last lament
purchased wind that wanting bought,
secured upon dead air;
were they wasted without thought,
dispensed without a care?
was each plucked with great concern,
did you and Love conspire?
placed in hands that upwards yearn,
where action meets desire?
gently to the earth I blow,
down where all the wishes go
Published 22nd Apr 2021
Author's Note
NaPo 2021 21/30 62 unique words
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22nd Apr 2021 10:26pm
You are really good at the sonnet form, Luna. You seem to have a natural ability for rhyme that doesn't feel forced. There's something mystical about this one that calls to the inner child.
My grandprecious calls them Wish Flowers. I will never forget that day we drove up in my driveway and my lawn man had not mowed the day he was supposed to. I was so angry but before I could say a word, Grey shouted from the back, "LOOK! NANA! LOOK! WISH FLOWERS! WISH FLOWERS! THEY'RE EVERYWHERE!"
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My grandprecious calls them Wish Flowers. I will never forget that day we drove up in my driveway and my lawn man had not mowed the day he was supposed to. I was so angry but before I could say a word, Grey shouted from the back, "LOOK! NANA! LOOK! WISH FLOWERS! WISH FLOWERS! THEY'RE EVERYWHERE!"
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27th Apr 2021 4:42pm
Little ones have such a way of helping us see the world from a different perspective! Wish Flowers seems like the perfect name for them, after all. Thank you for your insight and for reading my words 💜
23rd Apr 2021 4:34am
Dear L,
The poem is beautiful from start to finish but I found myself choked by the ethereal beauty of your closing lines. Great write. H🌷
The poem is beautiful from start to finish but I found myself choked by the ethereal beauty of your closing lines. Great write. H🌷
27th Apr 2021 4:42pm
12th Jun 2021 8:15pm
I liked the awe and wonder of it, the underlying innocence in making those wishes as you watch the wind carry them away.
Excellent verse Luna.
Excellent verse Luna.
