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Hey past life
Hey past life
We haven't spoken in a long while
I hope everything is alright
I'm doing way better than I expected on this side
Sorry for the silence
I've been distracted by the beauty of everything I've denied
The grass isn't greener on this side
But in two hundred and so days I haven't thought about ending my life
Believe me, I've learnt to break the ice
I have cracked my shell and got a new lease on life
I haven't forgotten about you and I
But I think in past is where you now belong
I can assure you, I would use the experience I got when being with you
to get me through the tough times
That's something I know you can handle just fine
Don't confuse this as a goodbye
But our time together is over
I'm not going to treat you as a stranger as though you don't exist
I will always have you in my mind
I will use you as a foundation to build a new life
It’s time for me to make new memories, relish in new mistakes
Not saying that I’ll forget the one's we’ve made
The good, the bad,
The times you made me cry
And the times you made me smile
I promise not to forget
But I need to let go of the cross I’ve been carrying around
Letting past experiences drag me down
But this time around I'm making peace with you
Washing myself anew
And letting go of the hand brake this time
I hope you will be just fine
Forever
I'll be yours and you'll be mine
But just not together...
Published 6th Apr 2021
| Edited 7th Apr 2021
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Hello :) so I feel that this beautiful and well crafted poem would be better served with a different font .
Courier font is a distracting for this many words, plus the placement makes your words look all over the place, a bit busy. I would suggest picking a different front and dropping down some of your lines, to emphasize your points and rhymes :)
👍🏻😊
Example:
I haven't forgotten about
you & I (you & I) edit?
But i think in past times
is where you belong,
i asure that i will use
the experience i got <<
( when you’re gone ?) edit?
when i was with you ( not )
to get through some tough times
That's something i know
you (can do) edit?
and handle just fine
This poem is well written and I enjoyed the message 👍🏻😊
I would heavily suggest a new font
Jmho
Write on !
Zazzles
Courier font is a distracting for this many words, plus the placement makes your words look all over the place, a bit busy. I would suggest picking a different front and dropping down some of your lines, to emphasize your points and rhymes :)
👍🏻😊
Example:
I haven't forgotten about
you & I (you & I) edit?
But i think in past times
is where you belong,
i asure that i will use
the experience i got <<
( when you’re gone ?) edit?
when i was with you ( not )
to get through some tough times
That's something i know
you (can do) edit?
and handle just fine
This poem is well written and I enjoyed the message 👍🏻😊
I would heavily suggest a new font
Jmho
Write on !
Zazzles
6th Apr 2021 10:05pm
Let's see...
Well I changed the font and you were write it's easier to read more...
I'll rewrite it on paper and see if I love the flow then I'll make the changes....
Thank you
Well I changed the font and you were write it's easier to read more...
I'll rewrite it on paper and see if I love the flow then I'll make the changes....
Thank you
