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lord i ain't much
and ain't a thing i can say
that tells it truer
than the mess i've made
and good god
how my mind
reaches
for something --
how it flails
for a mighty hand
pushed through the ether
or an angel
breaking through
or some sort of miracle
some shift in the wind
some sacred and undeniable truth
to press itself upon me
and free me
and make me whole
and pure
and right
and righteous
but ain't a thing
to save me
but just old me
amen
and ain't a thing i can say
that tells it truer
than the mess i've made
and good god
how my mind
reaches
for something --
how it flails
for a mighty hand
pushed through the ether
or an angel
breaking through
or some sort of miracle
some shift in the wind
some sacred and undeniable truth
to press itself upon me
and free me
and make me whole
and pure
and right
and righteous
but ain't a thing
to save me
but just old me
amen
Published 6th Apr 2021
Author's Note
A poem about anxiety or grief. Regret.
I am a praying "atheist."
I grew up Catholic.
I'm always talking to Jesus.
I'm always looking for miracles.
I am a praying "atheist."
I grew up Catholic.
I'm always talking to Jesus.
I'm always looking for miracles.
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6th Apr 2021 5:54pm
I too grew up Catholic. (forcefully,so) Now, I also am an atheist, with a tendency for prayer (habit ingrained) but I once watched George Carlin do the funniest stand up bit about prayer and religion and how he reconciles his 'faith and ever since I do exactly what he describes! hahaha... When he passed away, I started incorporating him into my mix as well. This piece just reminded me of my silly prayer ritual, when I feel the need... and of George Carlin and Joe Pesci.. lol 😂
https://youtu.be/8r-e2NDSTuE
Ty for sharing, Jav
Your poems are inspiring!
🌹
x
B
https://youtu.be/8r-e2NDSTuE
Ty for sharing, Jav
Your poems are inspiring!
🌹
x
B
7th Apr 2021 1:20pm
I love that bit! Thank you, Blue.
George Carlin was a true genius. What would he have to say about the state of things in 2021? We are deprived by not knowing.
Catholicism. I thought I wanted to be a priest, but I outgrew that at about age...five. By that time the neural pathways had been established and Jesus was just another thing I had to live with.
Thanks so much, Blue.
Always appreciated.
George Carlin was a true genius. What would he have to say about the state of things in 2021? We are deprived by not knowing.
Catholicism. I thought I wanted to be a priest, but I outgrew that at about age...five. By that time the neural pathways had been established and Jesus was just another thing I had to live with.
Thanks so much, Blue.
Always appreciated.
6th Apr 2021 6:48pm
Atheist makes 3
I pray in the shower, the water collides with my tears ...
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I pray in the shower, the water collides with my tears ...
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7th Apr 2021 1:33pm
That is a great line.
I should say, another great line.
An honor, my friend. Much appreciated.
I should say, another great line.
An honor, my friend. Much appreciated.
7th Apr 2021 1:52pm
As I was writing that line I said that to myself
Might make a poem out of it one day !!
Thx
Might make a poem out of it one day !!
Thx
7th Apr 2021 4:49am
Dear J,
This was such a poignant prayer that Jesus and all the saints just stood up to listen. I think this is the kind of angel speak they want to hear. As part of the Catholic crowd and all its oddities I really found a great kinship in your lovely write. H🌷
This was such a poignant prayer that Jesus and all the saints just stood up to listen. I think this is the kind of angel speak they want to hear. As part of the Catholic crowd and all its oddities I really found a great kinship in your lovely write. H🌷
7th Apr 2021 1:31pm
Hi, Honoria. I'm glad you liked this poem, which was almost as spontaneous as my prayers can be.
I am no longer Catholic but they say you're always a Catholic and I know there is some truth to that. I have known some ex-Catholics that claim to be unaffected by their youth in the church, but I am just reconciled to the impact it had on me, and go about my atheistic way, praying as need be.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
J.
I am no longer Catholic but they say you're always a Catholic and I know there is some truth to that. I have known some ex-Catholics that claim to be unaffected by their youth in the church, but I am just reconciled to the impact it had on me, and go about my atheistic way, praying as need be.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
J.
7th Apr 2021 7:03pm
I feel it. As we are all (to some degree) fuck-ups in need of severe redemption. Let us pray.....and party while we still can.
8th Apr 2021 3:11pm
