The Gift

“I think this world needs a little more emotion” — that’s a sentiment I can wholly get behind.

I really liked the imagery in this and I think the picture of the marionette helped as well. You get this sense of control; that our behaviours are somehow coerced by things unseen.

I like how it descends into “I think this world needs a little more rage” further down making it a direct contrast to the first half of the poem.

Hold on to your gift of poetry. It suits you well. Thank you for sharing.

-M

This is such a wonderful comment. I really appreciate the read and comment. Thank you.

Nice introspective write ... great flow ...

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem 😁

Love it! Fantastic piece...  
The second stanza ("slept on a sunny day...") is so deep n gives one food for thought...  
There are  many stunning verses.... Loved the line "craft that pain into a bird  
watch it fly off "

Thank you, friend. It's always awesome to hear from you. 😁

Well DC.... you had me transfixed immediately with "I'm a fucking dynamo." Amen, brother!!!
YOU ,very much are. ;) There's so many great lines to pull out and showcase here that it's copy/paste worthy in whole... lol. I feel the frustrations, the desires and hopes buried within the angst of these recent days... straight from your page. I can relate... so very much here. Reading your thoughtful, well crafted piece is MY release for enormous emotion/rage /solidarity.... because I'm right there, too, DC... screaming out, bleeding my pain, alongside and within this awesome mutual gift of poetry.

I thank you wholeheartedly for sharing yours, with us. 🙏
Much love and respect,
🌹

The world is very frustrating these days. But I also feel we get told we can't feel any negative emotions as if that's a bad thing. It's relieving if put into something creative. Thank you very much friend for reading, and leaving such a great comment.

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem 😁

I agree that sometimes the dark skies and rain is beautiful. We do seem to get tested all to often. The world does need more emotion... I have plenty but I do hold it in and some stuff can definitely make you tense. Had some more of that recently, sometimes releasing it is not so easy but I like the idea of watching it fly away. Love the zombie apocalypse angle. I think it's easy to see what you mean regarding marionettes and puppets. There is a lot of sadness and anger in the world while people continue to play roles but that stuff shows through in one way or another and corrupts those around as well.  
 
I don't know if it needs more rage, seems like there is plenty but that anger needs to expressed in a different way. Anger is a powerful emotion that in some ways can be used to effect real change but instead it is mostly used to pull others down. Oh I love the last part regarding poetic release in relation to emotions. For deep thinkers who are very sensitive and hold a lot in it's vital to find a release. I can think of multiple ones but writing certainly is one of them. Another great write DC. :) Sorry for the really long comment. lol

Wow, so many wonderful comments. I wanted to reply on yours first. When I was writing this i was thinking what I believe changed with this world. I think it's not being able to express feelings in a creative way. We're told that we can't say this and act like that. And yes anger and rage is bad but can be turned into something beautiful. That was kind of my mindset when writing this. Thank you so much. I really appreciate the read and comment.

Uncertain if I'd read your work before but I'm glad I came across you today.

I'm always glad for any new faces 😁 thank you for the read.