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Wet Cement
What is it
What is you so fear
From the echo of a dent
In wet cement
Without light is without shade
What hadn’t been formed
Hadn’t been made
Wet cement
Published 2nd Feb 2021
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2nd Feb 2021 4:48am
Hi Skipper. There is a sense of cathartic encapsulation and release to your poem which resonates with me. Your metaphor is effective. Thank you for sharing this with us. 💖🙏
2nd Feb 2021 2:49pm
Thank you so much Daniel! Release was the foundation of this piece, I’m so glad it resonated in such a way with you and that you identify with the metaphor.
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- Edited 18th Nov 2021 8:45pm
2nd Feb 2021 6:12am
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2nd Feb 2021 2:58pm
RiAN,
Thank you for the feedback! The first draft of this piece was quite long and ultimately I wanted to convey the emotion in a powerful and condensed version. The sense of melancholy was a strong element in reference to the inner struggle.
Thank you for the feedback! The first draft of this piece was quite long and ultimately I wanted to convey the emotion in a powerful and condensed version. The sense of melancholy was a strong element in reference to the inner struggle.
Very good poem, Skipper.
Your handful of verses runs very deep like a cascade of water falling in slow motion.
... 😍👍
Your handful of verses runs very deep like a cascade of water falling in slow motion.
... 😍👍
