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THE FIST HIT MEAT
THE FIST HIT MEAT
EThan's fist flew fiercly through the air at Rick's jaw, a sharp mutual cracking of bone against bone, mixed with the soft squishy thud of pounded meat. Each attempted to smile at each other, wondering who would get the most stiches
as they mended their broken bones, and tended their new scar, as they meet once again in the E.R.
EThan's fist flew fiercly through the air at Rick's jaw, a sharp mutual cracking of bone against bone, mixed with the soft squishy thud of pounded meat. Each attempted to smile at each other, wondering who would get the most stiches
as they mended their broken bones, and tended their new scar, as they meet once again in the E.R.
Published 6th Jan 2021
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6th Jan 2021 12:19pm
7th Jan 2021 5:50pm
Not sure what the fuck you comment was for lol
Anyway
"a sharp mutual cracking of bone against bone" definitely felt that line, this feels like a deleted scene from Fight Club. Not really keen on the structure as it does feel like it's from a screen play.
But yeah I do like this.
Anyway
"a sharp mutual cracking of bone against bone" definitely felt that line, this feels like a deleted scene from Fight Club. Not really keen on the structure as it does feel like it's from a screen play.
But yeah I do like this.
8th Jan 2021 8:00am
Thank you, Ronethone, nice comment. The FUCK YOU is married to the poem itself, an expression of my feelings, and every moment of my life is a deleted scene from a screen play. Play on....
Hey, thanks, AspergerPoet56 for your reading list entry. I love your work, and will try to read more of it. I'm trying.....
TOO much, SO little time....
AAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
And then a moment of peaceful reality
TOO much, SO little time....
AAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
And then a moment of peaceful reality
2nd Feb 2021 9:54am
This was a fun moment in time. Best friends just being drunken fools? Idk. It was a good read, thank you.
7th Feb 2021 12:55pm
Thank you, Ljdynami , This is just a fictional poem based on fictional fucking shit, from experience. Getting my ass kicked in the alley by the bully while his crony told him to let me be, as I pick up the brick for defense, the bully grinned, and I dropped the brick and took the punches, because I knew that if the brick missed his head, my head would get the brick, instead................................
