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18th Dec 2020 10:19pm
Beautiful entry, Slip! Best of luck in the comp!
Few notations you may want to correct:
Clean sheets is what the future holds
( I would omit that's - and sheets is not possessive )
Toward's tomorrow['s] bright
( Towards is not possessive; tomorrow's is )
I would add a comma after Twenty One, and thresholds doesn't contain an 'a'.
The final line is somewhat confusing, slip. Perhaps just a comma:
Raised expectations, spikes that bite
Few notations you may want to correct:
Clean sheets is what the future holds
( I would omit that's - and sheets is not possessive )
Toward's tomorrow['s] bright
( Towards is not possessive; tomorrow's is )
I would add a comma after Twenty One, and thresholds doesn't contain an 'a'.
The final line is somewhat confusing, slip. Perhaps just a comma:
Raised expectations, spikes that bite
21st Dec 2020 2:12pm
Great reminder as we usher in 2021. Thanks for the inspiration. Peace. oral
21st Dec 2020 6:53pm
