African Drum

very nicely done

Thank you, dartford. x

Enjoyed the nostalgic imagery interwoven with the present. The end stops add a rhythmic beat. Not sure if was your intention; however, it works.

Thank you, Aha. My intention was to make a “pure” 5-7-5 haiku, without metaphor or enjambment or other conscious poetic technique, so I’m glad that the adherence to the form generated rhythm.

Love minimalist poetics .. & sure you excel here.    
 
read above your reply to comment..  still this takes me to much metaphorical layers ..inspite of it being delivering straight as you say.. the oak & goatskin ..somehow takes a living vibe of frame & flesh.. of us the human species through evolution..the title African takes me direct hinting  to the centric origin of us..s2 is much direct genetics for me ..also motherly love tat is eternal..that you juz hit it clear with the present tense 'hangs' in s3.. old room in s3 talks of a fading times- & yet in change.. but you see, your previous s2 & 'hangs' hav done enough  good to infuse in the eternal mystical continuum ..of human soul.. of love.. of this now .. also this read has that melancholic, & yes existential ring, to it in those s1 & old room  .need to add..of am right or wrong...i feel the crux of the whole melting poem..is " given me" you has juz delivered everything you wanted to say juz in that i feel.. ...juz me:)...beautifully done!! & this piece will resonate long .shine on :)

Thank you for your kind and in-depth commentary. x