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ok you’ve worn me down
you’ve awoken some sort of beast
that wants to bind and fondle you
dress you in tight clothes
and the trite, shiny heels that make my eyes pucker
make you into a piece of candy
tether you to things and cliches
so i can whisper puzzles in your ear
for hours on end
till my words make you glisten
and effuse the truthful lust inside you
till you blossom beyond
what days before have denied you
till you equally want release
and relief
as i caress you
through plateaus of elation
and tears flow
in concert with your juices
resting your head upon my lap
holding your weeping mind
taking my pleasures you’ve allowed me to
you’ve given to me
an inverted gift
an exchange of needs
until you beg me for more
you’ve awoken some sort of beast
that wants to bind and fondle you
dress you in tight clothes
and the trite, shiny heels that make my eyes pucker
make you into a piece of candy
tether you to things and cliches
so i can whisper puzzles in your ear
for hours on end
till my words make you glisten
and effuse the truthful lust inside you
till you blossom beyond
what days before have denied you
till you equally want release
and relief
as i caress you
through plateaus of elation
and tears flow
in concert with your juices
resting your head upon my lap
holding your weeping mind
taking my pleasures you’ve allowed me to
you’ve given to me
an inverted gift
an exchange of needs
until you beg me for more
Published 12th Dec 2020
Author's Note
i rarely offer notes...but felt it important to state that this piece is purposefully experimental and highly uncharacteristic of me...it is a suspension of all the things i am in order to understand the things i don't. i may, just have to even delete it at some point!
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What a way to get into the head of another, then. You were utterly and so completely successful! This penned write is doused in the erotic and sensual. I've read it twice and I'm all a flutter.... lol ;) The second time, trying to detect your uncomfortability, and I was unable to do so. You could have fooled me!! After reading your author's note, I hope you decide to keep this write, as a reminder of your well expressed knowledge from this chosen preferred dynamic - that's so far from your own... It's really a turn on and should be a source of pride (just my opinion!) for you, that you can put yourself in this head space, even if it's so not who you are!! Most people aren't one spec as versatile or willing...
💜 that you are.
Much love and respect,
🌹 🌹 🌹
xoxo
B
💜 that you are.
Much love and respect,
🌹 🌹 🌹
xoxo
B
13th Dec 2020 4:51am
thank you! yes exactly what i was going for...enter a head i rarely try on. so great to hear i did it with fluency! :)
12th Dec 2020 4:06pm
Delete it and I will hurt you. Well that was my first thought but never mind. Once you have awoken that beast it is impossible to put it back in the cage. That desire to dominate someone, to dress them how you want only for you, and to treat them like a thing for whatever comes from those places in the mind people are afraid to go. The puzzles are a divine torture that awaken the flow in the mind and elsewhere. And it is the sweetest torment to surrender and satisfy every fantasy. Once you have gone to those places where the pain liberates and the pleasure has an unworldly intensity, then you find yourself begging for the next time. It is a gift bestowed and a gift taken in it's entirety.
17th Jan 2021 7:15pm
i was imagining giving someone what they wanted in form and in content...and in that taking what i would want from the situation like a looter i suppose! haha. thank you for that thorough read and response...i enjoyed inventing this and so glad it was heard.
