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Gratitude
So you want it real. . .as in honesty—
the kind that rattles your spirit
as a straight-up shot of whiskey,
no rocks or fruity drinks;
well, okay. . .
mine is gratitude
because it's 100 proof, real
honest and true—
it's also handmade
from my own copper still
See, at my age, I know
what conflicts are
regardless of circumstance—
mere opportunities to grow
regardless of resolution
They propel the vibration
of our evolution toward Unity
while maintaining individuality—
iron sharpening iron
These backroom brawls
can transform the darkest energy
to light if given a chance—
it doesn't mean pretending
these black eyes or busted lips don't exist—
on the contrary, they need to be recognized
for what they are on this physical plane:
drunken illusions not carved in stone
Today is a new hair-of-the-dog day
allowing us to surrender judgment
along with guilt or regret—
release any need to prove ourselves
in modalities of chosen belief
within confines of right or wrong
Fresh water and a mop is all it takes
to cleanse last night's blood and vomit
from the class room floor—
until the next brawlers enroll
What? I told you it was gratitude—
100 proof, and I thank you
for the opportunity to learn
But, if you don't mind. . .
I think I'll abstain next time—
I'm too old for this shit!
I'll take a piece of cake instead
~
the kind that rattles your spirit
as a straight-up shot of whiskey,
no rocks or fruity drinks;
well, okay. . .
mine is gratitude
because it's 100 proof, real
honest and true—
it's also handmade
from my own copper still
See, at my age, I know
what conflicts are
regardless of circumstance—
mere opportunities to grow
regardless of resolution
They propel the vibration
of our evolution toward Unity
while maintaining individuality—
iron sharpening iron
These backroom brawls
can transform the darkest energy
to light if given a chance—
it doesn't mean pretending
these black eyes or busted lips don't exist—
on the contrary, they need to be recognized
for what they are on this physical plane:
drunken illusions not carved in stone
Today is a new hair-of-the-dog day
allowing us to surrender judgment
along with guilt or regret—
release any need to prove ourselves
in modalities of chosen belief
within confines of right or wrong
Fresh water and a mop is all it takes
to cleanse last night's blood and vomit
from the class room floor—
until the next brawlers enroll
What? I told you it was gratitude—
100 proof, and I thank you
for the opportunity to learn
But, if you don't mind. . .
I think I'll abstain next time—
I'm too old for this shit!
I'll take a piece of cake instead
~
Written by
Ahavati
(Tams)
Published 13th Aug 2020
Author's Note
For SkyDancer's "Birthday Cake" Competition:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11527/
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11527/
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Re. Gratitude
Anonymous
13th Aug 2020 8:31pm
^THIS^ poem kicks ass and its totally you through and through. Edgy because you've danced along the high rise ledge and have the wisdom gained to step over the pigeon shit or avoid windy days. I love the alcohol metaphor and desperado saloon ballroom blitz atmosphere.
❤📝
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13th Aug 2020 8:35pm
GREAT! Now I have 'Ballroom Blitz' in my head! LOL!
Thank you always for your second pair of eyes! xo
❤📝
Thank you always for your second pair of eyes! xo
❤📝
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13th Aug 2020 11:02pm
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14th Aug 2020 00:50am
A man from the back yelled everyone attack and it turned into a ballroom blitz! Thank you, Paul!
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Recognizing the pitfalls of the life partying and frivolity is important especially as we age. For the young it seems like a right of passage... personally , I’ll take a piece of that cake!😄
BTW... Go Biden/Harris!,
BTW... Go Biden/Harris!,
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13th Aug 2020 8:44pm
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13th Aug 2020 11:31pm
100 proof indeed A...a powerful poem that sings sweetly in a world that has fragmented in a pool of cheap bourbon...there was once a party...now there is just a drunken brawl in every room...but you raise the ancient question...why did Pandora leave "Hope" in the jar? To ease our suffering...or to increase it...for me the party's over and I'm not about to clean up the ashtrays...so my dear friend, pass me a big hunk of that chocolate cake and I'l have another shot of Jack's and a little hard water lol. Bravo!!!
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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14th Aug 2020 2:28am
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14th Aug 2020 5:03am
One is never too old to be too fckn old.
I've heard tell of old folks freezin they's asses off right down the road here at The Fountain of Youth. If nothing else, you'll surely get yr pockets picked, (for a ''good cause'', of course).
I've heard tell of old folks freezin they's asses off right down the road here at The Fountain of Youth. If nothing else, you'll surely get yr pockets picked, (for a ''good cause'', of course).
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14th Aug 2020 1:19pm
Ha! I just want the cake, Danny! Those young whipper-snappers can have the outdoor fun!
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14th Aug 2020 2:44pm
That's what I love about you. You don't even know how good you are You have a great style too.
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14th Aug 2020 3:05pm
Thank you, Faith. It's those kinds of comments ( that don't have to be said ) which enhance the light in others through yourself. <3
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16th Aug 2020 2:59am
Dear A,
“ Today is a new hair-of-the-dog day
allowing us to surrender judgment
along with guilt or regret—
release any need to prove ourselves
in modalities of chosen belief
within confines of right or wrong “ I think this is so important and sometimes the most difficult thing to do. A daily struggle for me. I love this kick ass, take no prisoners approach to gratitude Ahavati style. All the best in the comp! You rock this! H🌷
“ Today is a new hair-of-the-dog day
allowing us to surrender judgment
along with guilt or regret—
release any need to prove ourselves
in modalities of chosen belief
within confines of right or wrong “ I think this is so important and sometimes the most difficult thing to do. A daily struggle for me. I love this kick ass, take no prisoners approach to gratitude Ahavati style. All the best in the comp! You rock this! H🌷
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16th Aug 2020 2:45pm
You have two choices after you fall, Honoria; firstly, you can get back up, learn from your mistake, and evolve; or, secondly, you can deny your part in the predicament and remain where you are, to learn the lesson over and over until you overcome. Believe me when I tell you that this old body is battered and bruised from the falls in her life. She's just learned from her mistakes! LOL!
Thank you, Honoria. I really didn't enter to win a comp; I entered what was in my heart. That's good enough for me. Much love. xo
Thank you, Honoria. I really didn't enter to win a comp; I entered what was in my heart. That's good enough for me. Much love. xo
Re. Gratitude
17th Aug 2020 10:11am
Wonderful Ahavati
Destruction is often the catalyst of creation and conflict a chance to learn
👍😀
Destruction is often the catalyst of creation and conflict a chance to learn
👍😀
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17th Aug 2020 12:39pm
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19th Aug 2020 3:14am
That was just brilliant. It like pieces of wisdom being fed line by line. You teach us a lesson in this, being grateful, being thankful for what we're given and what we do with it.
Good luck in the comp, I'm sure will love it.
Good luck in the comp, I'm sure will love it.
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19th Aug 2020 2:05pm
Thank you, Wally. I truly didn't enter to win, but for myself as a way of offering peace as I felt led by the Universe to do. I was grateful for the challenge and the opportunity to grow!
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