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So I’d found something I was good at
It was because you told me to try
If only I kept at it
I thought I was better but I was still the sad guy
I had been wounded many times like it showed in my tat
I was crippled with a diseased mind
My life was always grey and then it became black
Constant failures... I should have seen the signs
You almost kept me on track
I was proud to call you mine
Life requires energy but I ran out of that
I didn’t mean to die
I changed my mind...
But it was too late and it was time.
My final appointment
I was able to be punctual
I was only disappointment
I’m forever invisible like usual
I forced a goodbye
Because I Loved you
It was because you told me to try
If only I kept at it
I thought I was better but I was still the sad guy
I had been wounded many times like it showed in my tat
I was crippled with a diseased mind
My life was always grey and then it became black
Constant failures... I should have seen the signs
You almost kept me on track
I was proud to call you mine
Life requires energy but I ran out of that
I didn’t mean to die
I changed my mind...
But it was too late and it was time.
My final appointment
I was able to be punctual
I was only disappointment
I’m forever invisible like usual
I forced a goodbye
Because I Loved you
Published 12th Aug 2020
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12th Aug 2020 6:17pm
12th Aug 2020 7:48pm
Hi Whitefeather,
Your poem is impacting with it's honest voice and emotion. It has a terrific flow and I think would be great with an audio.
I would be thrilled if you would send an audio reading of this to the site's podcast, The Poetcast Project. I think people would benefit from hearing this and the feature may draw interest to your writing on site. If you would be interested, please send an mp3 or mp4, including your screen name and the poem's title, to:
undergroundoutloud@outlook.com
If unfamiliar, you can listen to the podcast here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/podcasts/
Member participation is the life's blood of the podcast, so I hope you will consider it.
In kindness,
Daniel
Your poem is impacting with it's honest voice and emotion. It has a terrific flow and I think would be great with an audio.
I would be thrilled if you would send an audio reading of this to the site's podcast, The Poetcast Project. I think people would benefit from hearing this and the feature may draw interest to your writing on site. If you would be interested, please send an mp3 or mp4, including your screen name and the poem's title, to:
undergroundoutloud@outlook.com
If unfamiliar, you can listen to the podcast here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/podcasts/
Member participation is the life's blood of the podcast, so I hope you will consider it.
In kindness,
Daniel
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I think your body may be from this world but your mind is from another galaxy where feeling is breathing.
