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A Ripple in Time
It rained last night
clouds bursting
pouring indifference
rumbled thunder
choked back
unshed tears
passing air kisses
never tasted
are you walking
wet asphalted road
with droopy trees
in washed sun light
Yellow lights in sepia
photographs born
of unrealised dreams
yearns for love unborn
clouds of darkness
embraces me
eyes dull
mitigating tears.
clouds bursting
pouring indifference
rumbled thunder
choked back
unshed tears
passing air kisses
never tasted
are you walking
wet asphalted road
with droopy trees
in washed sun light
Yellow lights in sepia
photographs born
of unrealised dreams
yearns for love unborn
clouds of darkness
embraces me
eyes dull
mitigating tears.
Published 17th Jun 2020
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If your asking if I bumped into Rob yet
Regarding the unborn and trying to heal....nope because that place won't even acknowledge knowing him.(even though they do).
Sorry just clarifying
Regarding the unborn and trying to heal....nope because that place won't even acknowledge knowing him.(even though they do).
Sorry just clarifying
17th Jun 2020 8:32am
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17th Jun 2020 2:27pm
Dear G,
I really like the setting you’ve painted in your piece. “choked back
unshed tears
passing air kisses
never tasted” having done this many times the feeling was very visceral to me. Thinking of all the things that might have been trying to appreciate all the things that are, it’s a delicate balance. Lovely write. H🌷
I really like the setting you’ve painted in your piece. “choked back
unshed tears
passing air kisses
never tasted” having done this many times the feeling was very visceral to me. Thinking of all the things that might have been trying to appreciate all the things that are, it’s a delicate balance. Lovely write. H🌷
17th Jun 2020 3:15pm
Thank you so much for your constant encouragement Honoria, its comments like yours that are tremendously supportive to most writers, and me. Thank you.
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17th Jun 2020 11:43pm
Recovery from thunder and rain is sometimes quite nauseatingly sad, drew in line by line and the next to last stanza is my favorite now. <3
18th Jun 2020 00:31am
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30th Jul 2020 9:24am
Hugs. It's pieces like these that we read and we write ourselves and hope doing the process will bring about some good healing. Hope it helped you
30th Jul 2020 12:14pm
