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Crazy
Thanks for being you
For sharing yourself with me
I'm probably crazy,
it's not just a phrase anymore
We're in the middle of a lake
swimming in ecstasy
You know I want to tell you
that I want to live this way
Forever
We have our own world
And your cupid's arrow hit me
I can tell you right away
and my secret is that I wanted
you from the very first day
Stay another night or forever
Let me have this one story
One story together
I guess I'm crazy about you
For sharing yourself with me
I'm probably crazy,
it's not just a phrase anymore
We're in the middle of a lake
swimming in ecstasy
You know I want to tell you
that I want to live this way
Forever
We have our own world
And your cupid's arrow hit me
I can tell you right away
and my secret is that I wanted
you from the very first day
Stay another night or forever
Let me have this one story
One story together
I guess I'm crazy about you
Author's Note
For anyone who read my last one yesterday, I realized it might sound like I was talking about a one night stand which was not my intent at all. I changed it this morning to better express my actual thinking. I am still figuring things out. I felt like I had to write something today if for nothing else to say that because it was bothering me and I did not know of any other way. :)
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Re. Crazy
2nd Jun 2020 10:48pm
A lot of us writers will agree that author intent is unknowable, people project ourselves onto everything, so when you publish your poem, it becomes something unique to each reader. Giving insight into your intent is good, but it's also good to accept that people are going to read anything and everything into it.
This is really sweet Kristina. 💖
This is really sweet Kristina. 💖
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Thanks Daniel, I really appreciate your insight! I think in most circumstances I would have just let it fly and let the reader interpret as they will, but when I thought about it later and realized some would interpret it that way it bothered me enough that I wanted to correct my error. If that only matters for me then so be it.
And thanks for your comment on this one also. 💖
And thanks for your comment on this one also. 💖
Re. Crazy
3rd Jun 2020 00:23am
A one night stand or 30 years. There’s no difference if your crazy about someone ❤️
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3rd Jun 2020 00:52am
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3rd Jun 2020 5:40am
I completely understand where you’re coming from. It’s comes down to how you represent yourself and your inner values. I would have had to correct it to. But I’ve had experiences where my poems have been interpreted way different than I had intended but let it go. But I’m this instance, it’s deeper than that. Nice write!
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Thanks Julia, I think it is important to allow people to interpret what is meaningful to them but also to be true to yourself. And some things can also be mis-interpreted regarding what you want. Casual one-time hookups are extremely easy but I think each time you give your body over in that way you lose something, something that will steal from those you truly connect with in the present or the future. I make no claims of being an angel but this is how I feel and my preference is to know someone. I have also had my share of being pressured or expected to have sex when first meeting someone and it can be a very uncomfortable situation or worse. After a while it really gets to you and it makes you question if that is all you are worth. I am sure you understand all to well.
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3rd Jun 2020 10:12pm
I hold the same values for myself! I understand completely. I feel intimacy is just that, intimate. Which requires you know someone on a somewhat deeper level and a strong emotional bond should exist prior to intimate physical contact. So trust me, I would have made myself clear too and stayed true to my character. These values are dying with each generation
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Re. Crazy
3rd Jun 2020 6:36am
Keep it the way it is. Interpretations and perceptions depends on one's intentions. Poetry is about your views and so is writing.
Keep going! Kudos!
Keep going! Kudos!
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3rd Jun 2020 10:06pm
Thanks Mssukser, I already changed the one I posted on June 1 which is the one I am referring to because I did not feel it was accurate for what I wanted to say. But the change made it much better in my opinion. Thanks for the encouragement. :)
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3rd Jun 2020 11:37pm
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7th Jun 2020 3:30pm
I edited it on the site so I do not have an original but the changes were minor but meaningful, mostly just the addition of the last line really.
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4th Jun 2020 3:04pm
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4th Jun 2020 10:02pm
If I could spread a little joy to the Devil's Child then at least I accomplished something. It is the best feeling but not without it's complications.
Re. Crazy
7th Jun 2020 11:30am
The biggest struggle in life, as far as I'm concerned, is the perpetual tug of war between our basic animal instincts and our alien inelegance. Nature wants us at it as often as possible yet our intellect tries to help us suppress those urges and be more civilised with each other. Sometimes we want to be in control, other times we just wanna give in and go at it like animals. A demon on one shoulder, a lawyer on the other.
Life. We work hard to experience it so the spirits that created us don't have to.
XXX
Life. We work hard to experience it so the spirits that created us don't have to.
XXX
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7th Jun 2020 3:32pm
We do have many internal struggles. :) A lawyer on one, lol - it does seem that way sometimes. Nature vs Nurture- what a war it is...
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23rd Jun 2020 9:53pm
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23rd Jun 2020 9:58pm
Doh!! I left out the keywords. I edited my comment. If you're the least bit crazy then I am certifiably so.
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Re: Re. Crazy
23rd Jun 2020 10:05pm
lol, I liked the original comment. I guess I am comfortable being called crazy - it happens a lot. :p
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23rd Jun 2020 10:28pm
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Yes, writing love letters to the DUP site itself is probably crazy. But, I think you are the good kind of crazy! : )
You should also fix your profile, you are a poet. And I think you know it! : )
PS. I got your message, the tent has some holes in it at the moment so the parchment is wet.
You should also fix your profile, you are a poet. And I think you know it! : )
PS. I got your message, the tent has some holes in it at the moment so the parchment is wet.
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17th Nov 2020 2:19am
lol, I have done far worse... and thanks ;)
I still don't think so, so there! Although I have never updated it so maybe it is time for a change.
Good, and yet still with the excuses. Although I must say, my mind did all kinds of .... stuff with that.
I still don't think so, so there! Although I have never updated it so maybe it is time for a change.
Good, and yet still with the excuses. Although I must say, my mind did all kinds of .... stuff with that.
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Re: Re. Crazy
18th Nov 2022 1:49pm
Well I am definitely crazy. ;) Honest and forceful, love that description and removing any doubt. It's quite interesting going back and reading these older ones and the messages as well. It is easy to misinterpret things so sometimes maybe you need to clarify. I am so happy you found it admirable and enjoyed the piece too. ;) Thanks so much for coming by and sharing your thoughts. I love that.