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Darkest dreams in the brightest light
an eclipse in the day
mind trembling under pressure
of keeping insanity at bay
a scarlet tear, an ivory face, midnight eyes i see
touch the sun hear the wind taste the freedom sweet
a single tear runs down her face
soft and sad she weeps
an eclipse in the day
mind trembling under pressure
of keeping insanity at bay
a scarlet tear, an ivory face, midnight eyes i see
touch the sun hear the wind taste the freedom sweet
a single tear runs down her face
soft and sad she weeps
Published 14th Jan 2012
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14th Jan 2012 11:20pm
Started hot!!! Should have stopped at pressure! sori, after that it went straight down the tube... describing the same thing more than once, multiple times! in a poem this short. one should attempt to use a word only once then move on...
15th Jan 2012 5:36am
15th Jan 2012 5:00pm
Paints a really good picture of someone struggling with anxiety! A struggle I'm quite familiar with...good work!
