Failure

Enjoyed the message very much! again, my biggest peeve is the abuse of punctuation!!! question marks where there is no question... period comma peiod comma.... boring (Who is this malfunctioning person, who used to be alive) two whos in different context... is there an owl in the room? even the ever hated THAT! would allow this to flow. Example: What if? bang, bang , bang
              Why? bang, bang, bang
Insignificance is a state of mind not a place. "screaming into insignificance" too much to chew in one phrase! Brilliance is in you! take sips! don't chug...

Thanks for the review. I agree on the question marks - I annihilated them totally - and murdered the owl. I can see what you are getting at with ,. ,. ,. but I find it really hard not to have them in there...
 
Screaming into insignificance - I think I am going to leave it. Appreciate what you are getting at.

I agree that there could be more of an impact with the full stops if it didn't follow such a comma, full stop pattern. But perhaps the punctuation could be boredom, same old patterns. I liked it!

i'm going through exams at the moment and this is exactly what i'm feeling

I really relate to this, that feeling of just wanting any pressure and fear of going in the wrong direction OFF of you, and that failing once and for all would set you free... You worded that pretty well !