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Lost.
In the night
Dark night
I am lost
Come find me now
I am tired
So tired
But sleep
Eludes me
In the dawn
Hopeful dawn
I am lost
Come save me now.
Dark night
I am lost
Come find me now
I am tired
So tired
But sleep
Eludes me
In the dawn
Hopeful dawn
I am lost
Come save me now.
Published 13th Jan 2012
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13th Jan 2012 5:37pm
This is simple but has elements of real power to it, and the metaphor you are using is striking, restless, and discomforting. If you took out the repetition it would only enhance the tone
